Personally I wouldn't blame you if you never forgive me.
Let me tell you I can never express how truly sorry I am
Even as badly as I want to find the words to say it
And discover some miricale way of making up for it.
So why am I even trying if I know it's impossible? Because
Even though I know I don't desrve your forgiveness
Friends deserve heartfelt apologies if someone has been
Offensive, even when it was an accident, they should not
Rationalize it and try to find an excuse to
Get them off the hook without even trying to tell the other
Individual how extremely sorry they feel for the
Very act which was hurtful in a way no one deserves.
Everyone deserves the truth from their friends.
Maybe I'll write you a poem, though I don't feel very poetic
Even though I don't think that could make up for my mistake.
Author notes
This was written for Annac after I made the horrible mistake of not realizing that she had written the very first poem anyone had ever written for me...then being a dumbass and telling her that someone else had. I felt an Acrostic poem to be fitting since she was the one that told me that was what they were called.
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Wow that was pretty good! You had wonderful words and strong emotions! You did great!
And yes, it is painful to hurt others. But I think she forgives you.
Anyways it was great! Good job!
Hope.
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Thank you...
as always you are very kind. I can deal with being hurt myself much easier than hurting someone else. You are right that she did finally forgive me. She is a wonderful person and a great friend. Did you notice that it was an acrostic poem? It was meant to be very subtle.
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Ouch
Yes, it is painful when you hurt someone, you express that well here. I get a sense of the wanting to do more than apologize, but having nothing to do to really fix things. I hope she forgives you
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More painful than being hurt myself.
You were right that I could only wish for something more I could do to make things right. Unfortunately there was nothing I could do except continue to write her poetry until she found it in her heart to forgive me. Thankfully she is a good person and did forgive me, though I'm still not sure I'm ready to forgive myself. Did you like the way the fact that it was acrostic was so subtle? I think that was one of her favorite parts of the poem. -
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OH!!
I didn't even notice that the first time I read it! brilliant!
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Lovely touching poem
This poem is quite lovely, It is not a poem that rhymes or has a pattern but, It makes a lot of sense and I think of it not as a pretty poem but, a touching one for who you wrote it for.
I think it is very nice!
language: 3, rhythm: 1, subject: 5, tone: 3, form: 2.
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I'm glad you found it both lovely and touching.
Thank you for taking the time to read and comment on my poetry. Since I already told you about the qualities of an acrostic poem I won't repeat myself here.
Thanks again.
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You're getting great at these, Brian! I hope you got my message letting you off the hook for overlooking my poem. I appreciate all the apologies and am here, again, to remind you that all is well.
As for this poem, I think what you've done is great, and definitely more advanced. I like that you've integrated the spelling, letting sentences spill from one line to the next and making the fact that it's acrostic much more subtle. It's a pleasant surprise..discovering that such a natural, flowing poem has a hidden message in the first letters of each line..almost like a game!
Well done, Brian.
Your friend,
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I'm so glad you found it in your heart to forgive me.
You are truly a wonderful person and a fantastic friend. Not everyone will appreciate the style of this poem. Some will surely over look the fact that the title Is intergrated into the lines as I did on the poem you wrote for me. I thought of using bold to make it stand out but decided you might like better with it blended in. Yes it is a delightful surprise. Unfortunately niether pleasant or delightful describe my reaction to finding the hidden message in mine because of the circumstances. Now I am both and so much more. You yourself blended your hidden message in so well...
Well done to you, Annac
Your friend,
BrainB
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honest opinion from the newb good point not so good poem what u apologizing for
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I appreciate your honesty.
An acrostic poem doesn't always have that poetic feel to it. It's not always easy to say what you want using a specific letter to start eack line. Try it sometime. In this instance the message was more important than rhyme or rhythm or extensive use of profound words. The answer to your question was in the authors notes. Thanks for reading and commenting, I appreciate that also.
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I am sorry that this happened, for the both of you. I hope that you have been able to come to terms with the misunderstanding. It is hard to deter misunderstandings in cyberspace, with all of the writings, things get over looked, and notifications don't get sent. I have to agree with the other comment, your feelings were conveyed very well within this poem. I really liked the use of several words in this form ie. Please forgive me.
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None shall be as sorry as I
I feel awful. Unfortunately there's nothing I can do to take it back. It doesn't help when I work out here when I'm half asleep. I thought an acrostic poem was fitting considering she was the one that told me that was what they were called.
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How sad...
You made me depress and gave me an idea of a poem
thnx
You're poem has strong words and the words are easy for thereaders to understand, which is good. Your first and last stanzas of words or pharagraph are really strong. You started it strong and continued and ended with a strong one,too.
A+
Good Job!
language: 5, rhythm: 3, subject: 4, tone: 4, form: 3.
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Sorry I depressed you.
But if it gave you an idea for a poem then I'm glad for that. I'm glad you felt it was strong. Thanks for the comment and compliment.
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