How could I have overlooked
something as special as...
a young man's first kiss
the beauty of a sunrise
a majestic mountain top
the vastness of the seas
a crystal clear blue sky
something as incredible as...
the growth of flowers in the spring
a stand of ancient trees
the wonder of an eagal in flight
a clear evening sunset
the miracle of a new born child
something as sincere as...
a kitten's soft purr
the moistness of puppy kisses
a young child's love
the parent's promise to protect that child
a rainbow in the sky
something as incredibly special and sincere
as the very first poem written for me?
I am simply a man who...
is flawed by nature
born to make mistakes
then pray for forgiveness.
Author notes
Another heartfelt apology for Annac who wrote not only wrote a poem for me but the very first poem written for me, which I failed to grasp in my awakening state. I'll never be able to express how sorry I am.
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How could I have overlooked this beautiful poem? Maybe it was because I was so busy telling the world to eat ass.
hehe... This is beautiful. Thank you for the comment on my work of "something" lol.
language: 5, rhythm: 5, subject: 5, tone: 5, form: 5.
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Thank you
It's easy to get to that point where you feel like telling the whole world that they can't even have the pleasure of that. I'm glad you liked this. I really liked your poem. It is a poem you know.
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And again, Brian,
no apology necessary..though this poem is lovely. I'm sorry for the heartache but I'm glad you've gotten - at the very least - reason to post a couple of good writes. Where would us poets be without a little bit of woe here and there to get us putting it down on paper?
It must have been an interesting exercise trying to think of things to compare to the feeling of receiving your first poem. You've got a pretty good list here.. a first kiss, the sky, a parent's promise.. all of these offer vivid images to the reader and help us relate to what you feel is of most importance.
Very nice, it's been great to see you grow as a writer in such a short amount of time. I know I've mentioned I'm a sucker for free verse poetry, but don't forget about your rhymes! I'd love to see some more of your signature style with this new, fancier language you've been exploring. Try it out!
Can't wait,
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You may not require an apology...
but I still feel it necessary to tell you I am still so very sorry. You are so right that heartache and woe beget much poetry. I'm glad you liked this. I will call it a success. As you reminded me of my rhymes I used my rhyming combined with a rule which is something also new to me (I don't follow rules very well). When I have time and my inner poet is willing to provide the sustenance to my humble rhetoric I may dedicate to you.
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