I know you.
The pain that shaped your hearts container, it does not but redefine ancient limits.
True strength is not a monarch, but that which can find a way through the abyss of the impossible.
I know you..
When fair hearts meet faint heads we all give in to the relentless rape of equality.
Sick from the facade that life forged and you designed, awestruck now by the burden it bares you.
I know you...
The burning smell of beastly trepidation in your eyes hides not but one lair behind your minds sole.
Hold your head higher then your heart that the blood may stop bombarding your heart with heavy woe.
I know you....
Your not but a shell of the former residual representation you aspired to be in youth.
Find freedom in forgiving yourself for you and I are siblings here. This cage is only limited by the definitions we use to create it.
Find form in freedom, feel fortitude from failures frequency.
Gnothi Sauton.....
Author notes
I have been asked a few times in comments to try writing a freestyle poem. It is very hard for me to do this and I fear this may be the best result I can produce. I would love to know what you think and hear any suggestions you may have for augmenting my methodology here.
"Gnothi Sauton" is Greek for "Know thy self"
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=[ You know, Enoq, this isn't very helpful to my self-esteem. Why are you so brillaintly and totally awesome? Sometimes all I can do is pout and whine that it isn't fair that I can't have your mad skills.
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lol
Please quit feeding my monsterous ego it will eat us all! Thank you so much!
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You 'know thy self' extremely well :)
I'm going to get 'my anal stuff' out of the way first lol - line 9 then:than, line 11 Your:You're - I also initially thought line 6 bares:bears and line 8 lair:layer and sole:soul but I wonder if these are actually a very clever play on words by the author because either word is valid.
Enoq your freestyle methodology is faultless and flawless - I really wanted to choose a favourite line but it is impossible because each line means something different but equally valuable to me - you not only 'know thy self' really well but you've described perfectly who I used to be before I braved the thorny path and emerged from the shadows into the divine light of me
Another masterpiece!
language: 5, subject: 5, tone: 5, form: 5.
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"Hold your head higher then your heart that the blood may stop bombarding your heart with heavy woe." I love this line it is powerful! -
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that is just how I feel sometimes ya know? -
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yes
I really do know :-) well done my fellow genius
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Until you said "sibling, I was not sure what kind of relationship this was describing. As usual, the way you lay the word down is beautiful, extraordinary, ummm... purely poetic! But it was hard for me to understand what exactly I was reading about in this piece
SHALOM!
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Not that sort
I was writing this to everyone that carries a facade but mainly to myself. -
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oh
Now, I will have to go back and read it again.
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It's one of those pieces that you have to read more then once and still wonder what the author meant.It is very deep writing ,nicely done.And in my opinion your poem is a bit philosophical .I really did like this.
~Feb~
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Thank you
I think its the Greek that throws people off for the most part. I have heard that from a few people now. I would say it is a general introspect on the way we project ourselves on others in order to understand ourselves better. In truth I was sort of convincing myself that I know myself.
Thank you so much for reading it and leaving a comment. I am glad you liked it.
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