I’m not a Poet
I can’t write a poem
it’s just too hard to do it.
If you don’t believe me
I’ll sit down and prove it.
I have a little problem
I don’t know how to rhyme.
I know that people do it.
Some do it all the time.
I can’t write a poem
it’s simply just too hard.
I’d rather stick my head
in a bucket filled with Lard
Author notes
I have no skills. Too Bad. Maybe I'll learn...someday.
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"Skills are relative"...as my friend would say.
You've almost captured the ever-elusive ramblingity in this poem. If you're a liiiitle more stealthy next time, maybe you'll be able to tap it on the head before it notices you and flees.
But the voices in my head have one complaint, though, and beg your forgiveness for mentioning it. They think that maybe if you took out the 'just' in line 11, it may run a little smoother.
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Thanks
This was just a little something I wrote for fun for my son when he needed poems for a poem book for school. He had to rewrite them so I kept them short and simple. He was complaining that he couldn't write the one he was supposed to. Thus this one was born. Whenever commenting on my poetry you needn't beg forgiveness and please feel free to speak your mind. Well, here's the thing. The voices in my head argued about it and never really reached a firm decision so we left it. I'll tell them to talk it over again bearing in mind what your voices said and see what the decide this time. No promises though because sometimes they argue foever and never reach a decision. They say thanks for the advice though, it's always welcome.
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haha, stop being so hard on yourself! You do to have skills! I really like it, even if it is a bit silly, but it makes me laugh (in a good way), its joyful, and I've been reading some sad poems on this site lately, so it was good to read a happy one for once!
And trust me, I CANNOT rhyme, and as hard as I can, I just can't rhyme, sadly.. lol
Great job!
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Awww..Thank you.
I'm not being as hard on myself as you think. I wrote this for my son to put into a poetry book he had to make for skills. It's meant to be silly and make you laugh. I'm sure that there is any way to laugh that is a bad way, unless it is of course at someone elses expense. I however love to make people laugh even when it's with my funny face. Whenever you need a laugh just stroll through my Poetry Garden and you will probably at least giggle.
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You are inspirational!
You actually are a poet
Its plain for all to see
Your rhyme has found its rhythm
and that really is the key
to expressing life's emotions
when you're happy or you're sad
You touch the hearts of others
Now that really can't be bad
Make sure you kick that bucket
The one that's filled with lard
Cause I do declare with feeling
Brian Balzer is a Bard!
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Poetically Inclined
I see you are a poet
so poetically inclined
you share another habit
that is the same as mine
We both have a desire
to leave poems here or there
Is there a better way I ask you
to tell someone that you care
or just to leave a little note
to say that you were there
Natureangel I must tell you
I think you're very sweet
So I wrote this poem
to say I'm glad
that we could meet!
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Ha ha Brian. Stop being so hard on yourself. I think it's personally insulting, because if you have no skills, I actively TRY to be bad? You have skills, and you know it. But as long as you know that, nice silly poem. =] Especially the ironay of a rhyming poem talking about how you cannot rhyme. That's priceless.
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Thank you,
It was meant to be silly and full of irony. I have to fight not to rhyme. I'm glad you think I have a few skills. I wrote this for my son Tommy to put into a poetry book he had to make for school.
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lol i didn't realize you were ryming until i read ti again
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Seriously, I'd rhyme if I could, really I would. Think I should?
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lol is this a poem
pshhh i can't ryme either.
a poem doesn't have to sound pretty to MEAN SOMETHING
you can write a poem i no it
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Thanks,
I can rhyme just a little. I could've stuck that in the middle. I know it doesn't have to rhyme. I still do it all the time. If it doesn't that's just fine. I just can't find another rhyme. So this will be the last line.
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Come on
Brian, Brian...
You can rhyme (well, better than I can)!
One suggestion:
I think* it flows better if you move "in" to the line above.
Just my opinion.
- A.C.
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I can?
I don't know. Does it show? Should I not feel so low?
Thanks for helping with the flow. I gotta go. -
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No, it doesn't show at all. You're a pretty good poet, overall.
Now when you left it got pretty boring, so I got an idea for a story.
Now as you can see (at rhyming) I stink, so in a contest you'd beat me in a blink!
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I'll tell you what I think.
I don't think you stink
Believe me it is a fact
you've done it here with tact
Ok so I will confess
I might win a rhyme contest
Now you see the simple fact is
I've just had a lot more practice
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