Note: not to be confused
with alphabet soup.
Making soup
is the most
like making poetry.
Anyone can make it
and you can
make anything
into soup.
All you need
is
stock,
main ingredient,
floating accompaniments (desired seasonings,
celery for bulk, and,
if you've a bold palate,
perhaps a sprig of honesty).
It may not be tasty,
but it will be,
undeniably
soup.
I find that most are partial
to a bowl of lies.
Simple
easy to digest with Saltines
bruschetta if you’re fancy
something you should be able to eat
even if you have the raging flu
You can make it from a can
You can make it from a pack
But be sure that if you’re
going to bother
toss in some flour and make it stew
because who wants to be
on a liquid diet?
And otherwise
thin generic poetry
like consommé
runs right through
and ends up
piss.
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Nutricious
"thin generic poetry like consommé runs right through
and ends up piss." Very true
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I like it. Very good way to talk about poetry I had never thought about the "ingredients" to poetry before. Enjoyable read good job.
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lol
I love it good stuff!
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Very good!!!
Sorry for the double-posting here; I'm still learning this site's navigations and such?
I loved this piece, it's so honest and simple, yet so complicated and "symbolistic" (metaphorical?) to be read... BRAVO, CelestialPie!!!
I see little (to "no") "improvements" I could suggest - PERFECT!!!
DrThimmel
language: 5, rhythm: 4, subject: 5, tone: 4, form: 4.
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Sorry, I left a comment (on another piece you'd written - the "Masturbate at the office" piece) earlier - somewhere else here - and won't repeat it again, okay?
I hope you got it; I'm not really familiar with this site's setup and such... sorry again?
DrThimmel B
P.S. Please ignore this - it was intended for the other piece you wrote - my bad?!!!language: 5, rhythm: 4, subject: 5, tone: 4, form: 4.
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Still writing
about food? It's a nice poem to read on a cold day. Really, it steamed my glasses as I slurped it down. Nice to see you still pluggin' away. C-ya. -
LOL!!
This is spectacular. I love the honesty, the analogy and last four lines are hilarious!
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Wow, this is really creative. I love how you compare these two things, and they really fit each other! This is a really neat poem, I love it!
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