Here
Mommy;
Here inside
You, impatient
To meet you. For our
Lives to connect outside
This protected barrier
I want to be just like you, to
Cuddle when I have nightmares. To me
Life has just started, and you don't even know
Wait! Where are we going, Mommy? The doctor?
What's wrong, Mommy? Did I do something
Wrong? Are you mad at me? Do you
Hate me? I don't understand, Mommy.
Who is that man and why
Is he hurting me?
I can't take the
Pain! I'm Gone
Mommy.
Gone.
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hey Grace
i agree this is a very powerful poem and could have a strong impact into shaming women who for whatever reason (rape, incest, immaturity, birth defect don't want a child, into having it, by evoking guilt. very well written. good job.
dave -
Wow, this poem is really good, and it shows a lot of emotion. Good job
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harsh reality
this is a really good poem
its literaly the harsh reality
people dont look at it from this point of view but they really should overall i felt this poem is great!!
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thanks, i was kind of scared to post it, but what the heck, right?
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harsh truth
These poems are always a slap in the face. The kind that everyone needs every once in a while. Good stuff. Vividly terrifying and yet innocent somehow. Thank you for posting it!
language: 3, rhythm: 5, subject: 5, tone: 4, form: 5.
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Very Strong
I put off reading this one because I knew it would do just what it did. It hit me hard. The structure you've chosen for this poem is perfect for it. You will stir emotions with this poem regardless of which view your readers take. Please excuse me while I go compose myself.
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Oh I really like the shape of this poem it really draws your attention to that climax of the poem. The change in tone very dramatic which is very fitting of this topic. You represented a good view of the argument without having to directly state anything very powerful words. Good job. ^^
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