We will often look but fail to see
life's treasures laid bare for me and thee
We often listen but do not hear
the voices of those who gather near
We often taste but fail to savour
nature's bountiful wholesome flavours
We often inhale but do not breathe
the floral scents of heather and heath
We will often touch but fail to feel
the depth of love that our sweetheart yields
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True
I agree with Enoq. The simplicity is the beauty here and holds a strong meaning.
It is good to enjoy all that you have around you; for it may not be there forever.
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So true
AC
the older you get the truer that becomes - over the last few months I have witnessed so many beautiful 'moments in time' simply because I opened my eyes and my heart - I saw a gorgeous full arc rainbow develop right before my eyes and it wasn't even raining
- I even got a pic of it partially reflecting on the river which is apparently unusual to get the reflection but the colours were so vibrant - I must see if I can upload the pic to here and write a poem about the moment this happened. Thank you for your appreciation and great comment 
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Monica
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Very Endearing.
I love the natural rhythm and the gentle rhymes. As you know this is my natural style which is one of the reasons it appeals to me so much. You use this style very well. All of your poetry I've read is very well written. It is very refreshing. My favorite line were:
We often taste but fail to savour
nature's bountiful wholesome flavours
This so often too true, especially now days. People simply don't take the time to enjoy and appreciate what they have.
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Natural and gentle....
.... you see right into my soul Brian
- I've also noticed the similarity in our natural styles which is why we both feel each others poems. Thank you for the fantastic compliment - I hope I am worthy 
- sometimes something happens in our lives which makes us stop and appreciate our blessings - I now try to do that every day - I don't always succeed cause I'm merely human but I do try
Monica
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SO true
I love observational pieces especially those that are about observation itself and are so well thrown together. Great job as always. And very true!
language: 5, rhythm: 4, subject: 5, tone: 4, form: 4.
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You say such funny things....
'thrown together' lol - I throw ingredients together to make a quick meal but I've never thought of my poems that way - now that I think about it though I have thrown a few poems together but I usually have to go back and 'make a meal' out of them - thank you for your lovely comments
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missunderstood
I suppose that as a universal visual this would seem a trivialization of the efforts put into this piece. I did not mean anything of the sort and in fact revoke my previous "thrown together" and would like to replace it with "crafted".
I loved this piece I certainly didn't mean it was loosely assembled. I was using work lingo which tends to imply negative connotations to brilliant work. Either way you know this piece is great. =) -
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I was teasing lol
I knew what you meant but the rascal within couldn't resist the opportunity to have a little fun
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Form,meter,rhyme..i`ve tried it and failed miserably.You,on the other hand,write like this with such beautiful ease and flair,there is no sign of struggle within this poem,no fight for the elusive word or line,it appears to be so easy for you,i`m sure thats not the case but it seems that way when i read it. The poem itself transmits a simple message,its the simple things in life(our senses,if we have them) that people take for granted the most.
Great work.
Bye.
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It isn't easy when you try hard!
Rhetorica
when I try hard to write like this it becomes difficult and complicated - when I relax and just say what I feel then it seems to flow naturally - there's a little exercise I do though that has really helped me 'think' in rhyme - I choose a word and then I run through the alphabet in my head and write down a list of every word I can think of that rhymes with the original word - this can also provide some inspiration and focus when your mind is busy with other things. As with all poets though, sometimes I'm really lucky and a poem just forms in my mind. I'm glad you enjoyed this poem and appreciated the message - I have a hearing loss which has taught me to appreciate all of my senses.
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just thought i'd say that is similar to how i pick out a word to rhyme, i used to do that, but now i go.. word,- ferd, obsurd, nerd, turd lol, blurred, occured etc till i start to find something decent that rhymes and makes sense and fits with my poem. sorry to hear about your hearing loss, you do seem to have heightened senses in other ways though like your aura seems really bright, strong, positive, intuitive and you radiate spirituality. well done for appreciating all of your senses and not letting it get you down -
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There is an easier way:
http://www.rhymezone.com/
Great poem, by the way. Sometimes we forget about the little things because of all the distractions, this poem reminds us.
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