The journey through my thorny path
was fraught with toil and tears
My pain and hurts, they weighed me down
as I wrestled with my fears
My thoughts they tossed me here and there
as I stumbled through each day
I battled with my need to flee
as my children bid me stay
So low I plunged, I could not feel
you reaching for my hand
So blind was I, I could not see
your footprints in my sand
Your gentle care, it touched so deep
it stirred my tortured soul
Your guiding light, it gave me hope
that I'd finally paid the toll
With eyes wide-shut I followed you
towards my nightmare's end
I stepped into a brighter day
my life once more to tend
Along the way you helped me find
this truthful, precious person
whose beauty always lay within
those hurtful, painful lessons
As joy returned my soul rejoiced
You were my saving grace
Your loving, gentle, thoughtful care
leading to this better place
Your greatest gift I thought might be
that you were truly psychic
Your little pearls of wisdom were
so timely and so 'Yikeic'
Your nodding skills, you have fine-tuned
I know that's what you'll say
But I'll thank the Lord that you are you
until my final day
There are no words that I can speak
No card that I could send
that would convey my deepest love
for you, my treasured friend
Forever in our hearts and souls
we'll have a special bond
We'll always be the truest friends
to eternity and beyond
Author notes
Friends are the angels who lift us to our feet when our wings have trouble remembering how to fly
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This poem is exceptional. I followed without any effort. 'So blind was I, I could not see your footprints in my sand' What a picture you paint with words! Keep writing, keep writing, keep writing
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The first part gripped me so that I had to read on. It's a wonderful poem that glides along very smoothly.. and you tell it very well.
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Thank you :)
Kitty
thank you for you lovely comment - I'm glad this poem 'gripped you' and that you enjoyed and appreciated the message.
Monica
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Beautiful,im sure your friend will treasure this poem,very touching and sincere,i cant add to what has already been written about it.
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Touching and sincere....
describes perfectly what I wanted to project with this poem simply because that is what true friendship does - sincerely touches our hearts and souls - thank you Rhetorica for your beautiful comment
Monica
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I COULD FEEL ALL THAT WAS SAID IN THIS POEM
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Thank you for your lovely comment Hyla and for understanding and feeling this poem.
Monica
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Just a beautiful write!!!
This was absolutely beautiful, I loved every single thing about this poem. It flowed so well and so naturally. The comment before me was correct in saying it had a gentle tone to it, which added to its beauty in my opinion. This brought tears to my eyes. You have a way with words that is rather indescribable. The fact that you commented that I was a great poet is even more so now, a compliment, after reading your work, you are so very talented, and a beautiful soul.
this line is incredibly beautiful:
"So low I plunged, I could not feel
you reaching for my hand
So blind was I, I could not see
your footprints in my sand"
I just loved this poem in its entirety! an absolutely gorgeous poem, written by an obviously talented, and soul stirring poet! Thank you for posting this!
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Aww thank you
Your comments brought tears to my eyes - when I'd been on share poetry for a few days I felt like I'd 'come home' - I feel so honoured and privileged to share this site with so many gifted and talented poets like yourself and to have those poets understand and appreciate my poetry and who I am is the greatest honour of all - thank you for your beautiful words. I love the stanza you chose - I cried with remembrance as I wrote this stanza because it marked a very low point in my life but as with low points it was also the turning point and my life has never been better - all the more so for having rediscovered my poet within and being able to share that with you. I look forward to reading more of your work.
Thank you from my heart and soul.
Monica
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lovely
not sure about the word 'yikeic' was funny though, was very hard to think of something to ryhme with psychic i agree, but i thought maybe, -'Your little pearls of wisdom were so timely and so well picked' ..? really liked the poem though, you should write greetings in greeting cards! i liked the gentleness of this poem overall. i dont know how to use these aplaud things yet
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Sometimes it fits.....
.... for a reason - the friend this poem is about would voice my thoughts so accurately that I used to say 'Yikes! you must be psychic' - then it became a special joke between us that made me laugh out loud - it felt so good to laugh again - I couldn't write a poem about this friend without Yikes. Thank you for your lovely comment - this poem is as gentle as the person it honours
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oh ok, i get it now, that its personal between the 2 of u
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