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Fall

All colors changing
Photosynthesis ending
For this year at least
Colors once absorbed
Now bounce back and show themselves
Creates the beauty of fall.

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  • Enoq
    November 3, 2008

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    I liked it

    I appreciate the scientific perspective on the changing of seasons you captured here. good job a good read for sure.

    language: 4, rhythm: 4, subject: 5, tone: 2, form: 3.


  • gingerhall1976 silver member
    November 3, 2008
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    well done...

    I too liked your approach to fall, my favorite lines were

    "Colors once absorbed
    Now bounce back and show themselves"

    this gave me a wonderful image in my mind, and you manged, with this poem, to give the ever changing fall colors, and plants, a life of their own. Well done

  • Hanah gold member
    November 3, 2008

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    I like the way you've described fall .Nicely done!
    Focusing in elements such as colors and photosynthesis you give us a new view of fall .I like the line "photosynthesis ending " instead of leaves are dead or something like that .