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Jasmine Tea

Such relaxation
Leaf and petal soaked water
Scent carried by steam
Floral, pleasant, and peaceful
Slowing my time to a halt

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  • bobertrellue
    November 20, 2008

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    this is pretty good. your admiration for tea is very apparent, but i wander what else is on your mind. one thing
    in the fourth line that bothers me is the word floral. pleasant and peaceful describe a feeling where as floral describes the scent. in that line you can describe the scent or the feeling you get from the scent, but not both.unless you were purposely trying to set an unbalanced tone. in which case rock on man.try to think of another p word for that line, im particularly partial to pungent.