At a far back table,
A little boy sits there
Alone.
There’s a mob
They are yelling at him.
Screaming and harassing
Calling him names
They laugh
They kill with their
Eyes.
They burn with their
Words.
The little boy
Cries silently.
But their words are too
Harsh.
A waterfall of black and
Gray form
They Fall down from his
Eyes.
Can’t they see?
Their choice
To hurt a little
Boy, innocent?
He thinks of
Death, pain.
You think nothing of it.
You don’t believe it would
Become too serious
Suicide,
No, he’s too smart.
So you’ll continue to
Hurt him
You decide.
The boy goes home.
His parent’s are gone,
Work, perhaps.
And decides
A choice.
He would never again
Shed a tear
Never worry.
He would just sleep
Eternity…
Author notes
Song inspired. I was listening to Hero (red pill mix) by Superchick. Great song. Very sad though. About the choices you make can affect others lives. The first verse is very sad, people thinking of suicide.
Anyways, I'd appriciate your comments, thanks,
Hope.
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Sad but Beautiful
You have a interesting way you write in this poem its story like yet is retains a nice flow in which keeps it in a poetic light. Thank you for sharing you work it was a pleasure to read this poem.
Your Truly
Distant Unknown
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Very beautiful
and a bit horrible! Only because I spent the entire read wondering why this mob was yelling at this poor little boy only to find out this was inspired by a song I need to listen to now! I love work that makes me think and I am sure this will open a chapter for me in the search for the song. Lol great job as always but I would love to know more about the scene you are creating here and why the people are yelling at the boy.
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Hey Enoq
Thanks for the read and the comment! I'll try your advice =].
Hope.
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Wow.....*sniffs*
Your poem soooo understand me... Ur a person Hope....*sobs* But I think you might want to change the last word which is "Eternity". I think you might want to change it to "For-ever" it just sounds good for me. It depends on you. But anyways, what a DRAMATIC poem...
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Okay, so it was the abuse tag. This is a good poem. I actually have my own poem inspired by Hero (Red Pll Mix). The normal one is okay too, but i like the mix better. =]
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Never listened to the regular verson before.
Thanks for the read and comment, Lake
Hope.
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