I had a dream just the other night
before it was over it made me cry.
We were holding each other on an empty beach.
We were dancing so close we were cheek to cheek.
Then you told me you loved me and I started to cry.
You knew you knew better but you asked me why.
I said I love another and my love is true...
so I feel like I’m cheating when I’m here with you.
You said “I understand but I know you know
there comes a time when you must let go.”
Then the birds started singing as the sun came up.
Your hair on my skin was like an angels touch.
I yearned to tell you that I loved you too
but I couldn’t say it because it wasn’t true.
I couldn’t find the words to tell you just how I felt.
But when you held me, I thought I would melt
into a pool of loving on that empty beach
as we watched the sun rise across the sea.
I was starting to wake and you were starting to fade...
you blew me a kiss and said I’ll see you someday.
Now when I’m under my covers I wait for your return.
Yes, for my dream lover I will always yearn!
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sad but honest. I like it
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Thanks
I appreciate the read and the comment.
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good one
I really liked it how you've brought out a guys personal experiences (maybe personal or out of imagination, if its the latter, I think you are even more amazing) and converted it a into beautiful poem and expressed those feelings so well. Really very touching. But why are you calling the poem Dream Lover? The title suggests a happy love poem but thats not what it is right, its more of a lack of realization that there was love on one side of you now that has gone away and love lost or something that did not work out on the other side (my interpretation), both very sad things. Another question - Does the guy feel love to the beach girl who will not return only because he has maybe lost his original love..in the context of the poem. Its not clear if he is still in love and has his original loveer by his side. Im only trying to understand why it has not been clarified somewhere in the poem. Thanks for the poem, overall very touching and well written, which is a granted thing in your case.language: 4, rhythm: 4, subject: 4, tone: 4, form: 4.
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Thank you
I appreciate you taking the time to leave such a thoughtful comment and make such an effort to understand the meaning behind the words. That in itself is touching. This was a combination of both personal experience and imagination in a way. I wrote it for a very sweet girl whom I went out with after I broke up with my first love. I was still deeply in love with my first love at the time. The girl I was going out with expressed feelings for me and I couldn't give her the same sentiment even though I loved being with her. As to the scene described in the poem, it was pure imagination. I called it Dream Lover because she was his lover only in the dream. Even in reality it was only a dream from which I awoke with an empty feeling. As to his feelings towards his dream lover, he felt longing and desire but it wasn't love and therefore he couldn't say that it was, in context to the poem and in reality. I think you perceived more of this poem than you realized. Very well done. Thank you for the wonderful compliment.
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UR SOOO MEAN!!!
Y didn't u accept her love? U meani......y I don't like u Mr. Hairy-Man.... But this poem is WAY OUT...... THE WORD AWESOME... I love it, it kills my heart LOl...
language: 4, rhythm: 3, subject: 5, tone: 3, form: 4.
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Yes I did...
accept her love but I was in love with a girl in real life so I was honest with her. In the end she turned into a dove and flew away. That's not my fault. When I woke up I missed her. I yearned for her to return and dance with me on the moonlit beach again. It kind of broke my heart too.
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This is a very beautiful poem. I could picture it all in my mind, through out the whole poem. The whole dream lover is just amazing too me, I loved this.
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Thank you,
I'm glad you found it beautiful. Telling me you could picture the whole poem is a wonderful compliment. I am honered that I was able to amaze you. I love that you loved it. Thanks again.
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Very sweet !!! Great imagery .I could picture everything and I love the way you've described your dream lover before she fades away .The beach ,her angel touch etc make your poem perfect and kind of heavenly touch.I don't know what else to say .It's beautiful .
~Feb~
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Thank you so very much.
I am so glad you found this one so beautiful. I think you have said more than enough. I'm honored that you enjoy reading my poetry. I appreciate you taking the time to leave comments.
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Forgot the applause
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You have a talent with rhyming, Brian? AC told you that, but I typed it anyway. Anyways it's very beautiful.
My favorite phase:
"an angels touch"
My Favorite line:
"Then the birds started singing as the sun came up."
Great poem as always!
Hope.
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Thank you.
I always tease that I can't rhyme but yes, it comes very naturally to me. I'm glad you found this beautiful. I think you meant favorite Phrase not phase, right? I like that phrase also. I also like you favorite line as I felt it describes what I've heard on occasion. Thank you as always.
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wow this is great. my favorite line would definitely be the "Angel's touch" one. the rhyming is amazing. the plot is awesome. i also like how you used this in the course of a night, or so it seems. from night (first line) to the "sun came up"
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Thanks,
I appreciate the compliment. That is one of my favorites as well. I've always been able to rhyme with hardly any effort. I wrote this when I was a teenager for a very sweet girl I went out with. You were right about the duration of the poem, all night on the beach with my dream lover. Even though it just says I had a dream just the other night. I was thinking of the duration of a night on the beach. Very perceptive.
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How do you rhyme like that? -shakes head- You have a talent, it's obvious. (Have I mentioned that before...? I don't know. Probably.
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You also have a talent of misleading, which is always fun in your poems. It has a sad tone somewhere in there...very good though.
- A.C.
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Thank you.
I don't know how I do it. There's really nothing to it. It's not something I think about. That's just the way it comes out. You make me sound so gallant when you say it's such a talent. I just like to be misleading when my poems you are reading. Thank you once again my talented young friend.
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I'm such a stalker. Awesome poem. It was so...perfect. I love the...format? I dunno. I could never write like that. Yes, that's a compliment. o.o Good job, person! ^-^
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Thanks Inkling
I don't mind a bit if you stalk me. I'm actually flattered that you would want to stalk me to begin with. You are using the right word when you say format. That is the way the words are layed out. I think you are an incredible writer and I know that you could write some Awesome poems. Let me know if you ever want to get together and I could help you write one. That would be a lot of fun. It could be about anything that comes to mind. Just let me know. -
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Lmao. I'm no good at poems.
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