Cunnin'Lynn-n-Gus
were a perfect together
like waterfalls in paradise
Cunnin'Lynn-n-Gus
worked together so well
things were sweet as honey
Cunnin'Lynn-n-Gus
had a habit of getting into
some slippery predicaments
Cunnin'Lynn-n-Gus
working together could
lick any sticky situation
Cunnin'Lynn-n-Gus
could usually make things
flow quite smoothly
Cunnin'Lynn-n-Gus
wanted to fulfill the
desires of those they knew
Cunnin'Lynn-n-Gus
brought joy to many
of those who knew them
Cunnin'Lynn-n-Gus
were loved by many for
the excitement they provided
Cunnin'Lynn-n-Gus
strived for the utmost
satisfaction with all they did
Cunnin'Lynn-n-Gus
filled many people's lives
with extreme contentment
Cunnin'Lynn-n-Gus
are missed by many when
they are no longer in their lives
Would you welcome
Cunnin'Lynn-n-Gus
into your life?
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HAHA. Great poem. Break away from the seriousness and boo hoo my life sucks once and awhile, and that's what you have here! I like it! It's always good to smile
language: 3, rhythm: 3, subject: 4, tone: 3, form: 3.
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Wow. Wowie wow wow wow. That was atrocious. I don't think anything as insipid as that has ever passed through these eyes. I've read better verses on crapper walls. You maybe need to get a girlfriend and spare the rest of us (poor girl.) i'm sure this comment will leave me wildly unpopular amongst the sharepoetry "in crowd." But I had to be honest. You've wasted your time, you've wasted my time. I'm going to read some more of your stuff. It can't all be this bad.
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Truthfully,
I had no intention of replying to this since I replied to your reply to Twila. However, after reading it again when I finally reached it on my list of comments I changed my mind.
The fact of the matter is that it doesn't bother me that you didn't like this poem. It wasn't "serious" poetry. Even when it is I'm not often offended by someone saying "I didn't care for this. Something about it didn't appeal to me." The problem is that you were flat rude.
In addition you didn't point out what you didn't like about it. Was it the form or format? Did you not care for the repitition? Actually, I guess in you way you did, you just didn't know how to say it with any degree of taste. You didn't care for the subject matter.
Atrocious and Insipid huh? Well you yourself have stated what opinions are like. You are entitled to yours. I do hope you find a better way of expressing it though so that if you do comment on someone who is going to take your opinion to heart they won't get hurt or discouraged.
As far as wasting my time? That made me laugh. No poetry that stirs some kind of emotions is a waste of time. That is the goal of a good poet. Since most of those that read this understood the humor of it they had a good laugh. Even though you hated it so much it still stired your emotions and therefore even if you had been the only one to comment it wouldn't have been a waste of time. -
I cant believe you. What kind of person are you? Do you not have a heart? Your problem is that you dont look deeep into poetry. No matter how short or cliched it is, there is always a hidden meaning behind each poem written. Why would you waste your time writing such a degrading comment? Are you really that heartless? Instead f pointing out what Brian did wrong or how horribly he did, you could have found something in there that was worth reading. But of course, people like you wouldnt dare bother to do that. you are out to degrade people. This poem was wonderful, you just cannot see it. You are used to the teenage/heartbreak poems that fly around this site, while Brian writes poems about life, love, and the world in general. He is one of the best poets I know on this site. To degrade him like you have is to answer to me. So get out. Learn to read poems.
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opinions are like assholes...
you shouldn't poke your nose into other peoples'...no, that isn't right...oh yeah everybody has one. I think Brian also knows that this piece is a real piece. Didn't you see that he rated my comment five stars. Brian can take care of himself, he is over forty. I might add that he is no slouch with the wit. So, If Brian had wanted me to have a new asshole; he would have installed it himself. Hear, hear!! -
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Ok...
I will be as polite as possible. Frankly, I tend to ignore rudness in comments and reply with kindness. I know this isn't the best poem ever. It was meant for humor more than anything. However, That being said you didn't just tactfully say you didn't like the poem. You blatantly insulted me personally. Not only is Twila my friend and likely irritated by seeing you attack me, [You maybe need to get a girlfriend and spare the rest of us (poor girl.)] she, as well as others, have been the victim of people who join the site with no intentions of anything but being insulting and causing trouble. Your comment comes off as just that. I'll have a look at your other comments. I know you were or also came off as offended by She Loves The Rain. I now wonder if you really are just overly sensitive or...
P.S. I rate most comments five stars. I like to see what most people think if they are leaving their Honest opinion even if it is a bad review.
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Not sure if you need all that repetition save for the first and 2nd stanza. Trimming fat is also always something to consider, do you need all of the following?
brought joy to many
of those who knew them
filled many people's lives
with extreme contentment
were loved by many for
the excitment they provided
Excitement spelt wrong also ^
I know this isn't a "serious" poem, still gonna offer my 2 cents hope it helps.language: 3, rhythm: 3, subject: 3, tone: 4, form: 4.
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Thanks
for your two cents worth. I still say any comment is a good comment. I'm always willing to listen to someones opinion. I just don't always follow advice. I really apreciate you catching my "typo".
When it comes to Cunnin'Lynn-n-Gus repitition isn't always really necessary. However, you'll notice that not one of the women complained about the repitition of Cunnin'Lynn-n-Gus.
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Brilliant play on words I take great pleasure in reading this lol
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Thank you
I'm glad you like Cunn'Lynn-n-Gus. Play on words though? What do you mean?
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oh my...love it
this was very well written mr. B...very well worded, and just clever indeed...lol...Loved it!
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I thought you might love this.
Why the very idea of how much you would enjoy it was inspirational. Clever? Whatever do you mean? I really am glad you love Cunn'Lynn-n-Gus! I'm happy to have been able to have provided it for you.
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"Cunnin'Lynn-n-Gus
had a habit of getting into
some slippery predicaments"
Hehe, care to share one of those slippery predicaments in your next poem?
language: 5, rhythm: 5, subject: 5, tone: 5, form: 5.
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Indeed!
I wouldn't mind delving into some of the slippery predicaments for you in another poem. Would you like kind of a tongue in cheek poem maybe? Certain parts of it might get kind of hard. However no matter how hairy it gets I think I could lick that for you. Of course it could be as smooth as a clean shave. Is there any certain way you would like me to thrust myself into it? Let me know if you take a certain position concerning it for that matter. I take suggestions well if you'd like me to pay attention to anything in particular. I'm sure you would be satisfied by the time it was finished. Between the two of us it would come together nicely.
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Hilarious poem,it didn`t dry up at all,kept flowing all the way through,cant see any cracks in it,you should write a sequel using that fella Tio..
bye.
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Wonderful!
I'm as thrilled as you that it didn't dry up for you. I was hoping I could keep it flowing. I reckon if anyone finds any cracks in it they were looking pretty close. I wanted to write another poem about that french girl called Fella Tio. The very thought made blood rush to my head. I could envision how deep I could thrust myself into that poem. However, I was afraid I would get sucked in and it would get harder and harder line after line. Worse yet, I could have come to the climatic point of it and have it be too much to swallow. Think of what a mess that would be. I decided to step back and get a grip on things first.
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hey brian
this was either one of the worst poems i've ever read or one of the best, so bad its good or so good its bad. anyway most people don't have the balls to write something like this nevermind posting it, so you get an A.
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Big brass ones?
Thank you. How could I not write it? My inner poet wouldn't Shut Up until I did! Why write it if you're not going to post it?
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LOL
You sneaky devil! You kept this out of the adult category, by playing on a word a lot of people won't know. Very clever! LOL -
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What ever do you mean?
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See there. You hid your meaning so well you can't even find it.
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