If I see you shedding tears;
I will shed tears with you
not out of pity but sorrow.
I would only laugh
if they were tears of joy
and I was laughing with you.
I would not say you were weak
but if you were weak I would offer
you all the strength that I have.
I could not walk away
because my compassion
would bind me to you.
If someone threw stones
I would shield you even
at the cost of my own injury.
I would give you
the shirt off my back
so to dry your tears on.
I would squeeze your hand
as tightly as you were squeezing mine
for as long as you wanted me to.
I would give you a hug
that lasted until all of
your tears had ceased.
This is what I would do
if I saw you shedding tears
so you need not be afraid.
Author notes
This poem was inspired and written in response to the poem
Thoughts On Shedding Tears by DebraLynn to view my inspiration click this link: http://sharepoetry.com/poem/30234
Thank you DebraLynn for giving me this wonderful poem.
What would you do if you saw me shedding tears?
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Wow, absolutely phenomenal. Guaranteed to make any hopeless romantic's (like myself) heart melt. If this is how you truly feel then your significant other is very very lucky. Overall I loved how your poem flowed and displayed such raw emotion.
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aw. this is so romantic! I loved it...
-Krista
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Thank you
for taking a moment to let me know you liked this one. I was moved by her poem and this poem was the result.
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Wow....
U made me cry Mr. Hairy MAn... U act like a teenager. Ur sooo inlove. Who do u like ,tell me? But seriously, ur so sweet. I only wish u would do that in real life. LOL!!!
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Aww...
I'm sorry I made you cry. I wrote this after reading another poem. I would do this in real life.
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this is so you
Brian as usual you are a breathe of fresh air...every line in this poem i agreed with, I know that you would do all of those things for someone because you are such a wonderful person with a beautiful heart. I loved every ounce of this poem as I do you! I will definitely have to go and read the inspiration behind this. Just a fabulous job by a spectacular person!
Ginger
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Thank you so much Ginger.
I appreciate the wonderful compliment. You honor me with you heartfelt kindness. I am so glad that you loved it. I really do owe it all to DebraLynn. All I did was type what I felt when reading her poem. Thank you again.
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This is a sweet poem Brian. I agree with Inkling on the shedding tears question =].
I love your poem Brian. It's so beautiful. And just so sweet!!!
Hope.
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Aww...Thanks
You are also very sweet. Having someone as special as you giving me a hug would definitly cheer me up and I would stop crying for sure. It makes me happy just knowing that you Would give me a hug. That's very kind of you. Of course I would hug you back.
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This reminds me of something my boyfriend said to me once.
Now I want nothing to do with him.
If I saw YOU shedding tears, I'd say, "No, that can't be Brian," but then I'd walk over to you and give you a BIG hug.
I love your poem. It's all...awesome like that.
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That's so sad.
You are so sweet, Thanks. I'd be happier if you hugged me and that would probably make me stop crying. I'm happier just knowing that you Would give me a big hug. I'd hug you back of course.
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Fantastic
This is such a beautiful and heart warming poem, I enjoyed every aspect of this poem. The rhythm is playful but caring, the language is flawless and I really like the format you used. Your feelings are also well conveyed to the reader, also you get a sense of an absolute devotion to this person of whom you wrote. Thank you for sharing your thoughts and feelings.
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Thank you so very much.
I appreciate that you not only took the time to but also took the time to leave such a thoughtful comment. I am grateful for all your wonderful compliments. I think to truly appreciate this poem people should really read Debra's poem. I simply wrote what her poem made me feel. I do feel the absolute devotion to someone in that situation even though I had never met her. I have stayed up late to comfort someone who was hurting simply because I could never turn my back on someone in need. Thank you again.
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