I'd write a poem
that made you think
I was going to say
something extremely
Naughty
and then I'd smile
when you admitted
I had fooled you
once again.
Shame on me.
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Ha! Made You Look!
I'd write a poem that made you think I was going to say something extremely Naughty and then I'd smile when you admitted I had fooled you once again. Shame on me.
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Darn, got me.
Now I'm going to crawl under the door, with tail, between my legs. Oh, I do that almost everynight..nothing new here.
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hahahahaha!!!
thats quite good. i completely went "e-gasp!" and thought to read something, well..indeed naughty but nope.
thats good, you got me!!! lol
indeed, shame on you.
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hahaha
yeah you definetly got me.
That's hilarious.
This is still a good poem though.
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hahaha. i think you got quite a lot of people!
it's actually quite a good poem anyway, even if it was a trick. I love the "and then I'd smile" line - it seems to be a turning point.
(i'm Tom btw)
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Thank you,
for taking a moment to leave me a comment letting me know what you thought of this little poetic prank. I'm glad you liked it. I liked that line also. It seemed to stand out to me. I honestly didn't think of it as a very good poem but I guess everyone else disagrees. I'm sure someone will come along to speak to the contrary. Someone always does. Thanks again.
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IT'S NOT A SONNET
'Cause that would have 14 lines--but neither is it a couplet, cause that would have just two But you did fool me, just as you said, So I give my applause to you !! (groan)But that little "versoid" is all you claimed it to be, and the story completes itself, and the form and language are solid, --What else do uou want ???
That is both courageous and super---
language: 5, rhythm: 5, subject: 5, tone: 5, form: 4.
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Thank you
I didn't havve a clue what it would be called. I just thought it would be funny. I'm happy with just the fact that I've fooled a wise man. I was satisfied with that. Having you tell me that the story was good for what it is and the form and language are solid is just a bonus. Thanks again.
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LOL ! Nice work there
I was wondering what possibly could be 'naughty' and concise to be put into 40 something words ! Plus taking a look at ur other pieces i didn't think u'd be someone who would explore the 'erotic' side of poetry ... LOL
Dont get me wrong
- Abhi
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Thank you
I'm glad you were able to appreciate the humor of this. I do believe I could come up with something in forty words. Now I should tell you that I've got all kinds of poetry. I've got at least one erotic posted. I've got some so far past 'erotic' that won't post 'em. haha Thanks again.
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Hahahahahaha.
Funny.
Jerk!
-Krista
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Thank you
Thank you very much. I'm surprised that a sweet innocent young lady like yourself would even click such a title. I'm sure you were just checking to see if I needed an adult rating on it though. hahaha
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Ah! I was actually half expecting to be blocked because I thought it would have the Adult tag on it. Clever, Brian...Yes, the world could always use more laughs.
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Thank you
for taking a moment to let me know you got a laugh out of this. You are right that if it really was a list of Naughty things I'd do it would have an Adult tag on it. I'm glad you found it clever. I thought it was but I was biased. haha Thanks again.
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haha
shit! haha you got me
its rare that anyone tricks me
i was like whaaa brian wrote something dirty!!!!
haha i love you brian
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Thank you
I'm glad to hear that I pulled one over on someone who is so rarely tricked. I will be honest that I do have some dirty ones. Shhhh... I know, no one thinks I could ever do such a thing. Thanks again.
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WHat......
What u say, is this poem for me or anything. I'm having a feeling that ur just tricked me... I'll get u Mr. Hairy Man. Anyways, Awesome, poem...
language: 5, rhythm: 3, subject: 5, tone: 5, form: 3.
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This was just for fun.
It was just a trick. You are right. I wanted to trick everyone.
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hee hee hee
You fooled me...again...I was like OH MY a dirty piece from Brian...must read it, and then tee hee hee...good one!
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Ha, ha, ha
This just hit me and I couldn't resist. I thought it would be a bit of good clean fun. However if you look...
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lol
well it works for a short laugh or at least smile, and the world could always use more of both.language: 1, rhythm: 1, subject: 1, tone: 1, form: 1.
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Indeed!
You know me I love to make folks laugh! I just think it makes the world a better place.
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Lmao. I was like, "Did he really post a story about this?" and then I pressed on it, and I was like, "Oh. This is so what he would do. So now when he messages me again I can eat his head."
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He, he he
This idea just popped into my head and I couldn't resist. I'm kind of like that. I'm gald you came and left me a comment. I think you're a Silly Nilly but I like you lots.
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This reminds me of a song called "Crayons Can Melt On Us For All I Care" and it goes, "I just wasted ten seconds of your life"
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Thank you,
I appreciate you taking the time to leave a comment for me. It seems like I've heard a song like that before but it didn't last very long. Thanks again.
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I KNEW THERE WAS A CATCH SO NA! FOOLED YOU!
i was thinking, brian wouldn't write anything like that, so i figured there was a catch. funny brian. you really got 'em this time. -
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Aww...
You just know me too well. I thought this would be humorous. I think this will get a lot of them. Thanks for the comment. I'm glad you liked it.
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