TO:
My Promiser
My Creator
My Mother
And Terminator
Kiss me or Kill me
Make up your mind
I can't even count
all those left behind,
Another visit to the clinic.
Just fucking get with it.
I hope that you know you
don't have to kill "it".
Of the living
I
So am jealous.
Please don't abort
Me
I'm defenseless.
FROM:
Those you've forgotten
who remain unnamed
and lost in heaven.
Your "Ball and Chain"
Author notes
FIRST I'D LIKE TO SAY THAT THIS POEM WAS WRITTEN ABOUT ONE INDIVIDUAL THAT I'VE KNOWN FOR ALMOST 22 YEARS NOW, I'm not targeting a group b/c I know abortion always isn't an option for some, & for others it's the only way for them to live a life that they actually can afford instead of doing more harm than good...this is just for the ones who were stupidly careless & got pregnant that way, then saw an abortion as the ONLY way out.
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Hey Marcus this was realy good..I could visualize the torment going back and fourth the uncertenty...
You played it out very well..Sad to say that some actualy consider this..Makes my stomache twist..great write.
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hey marcus
i thought that this was a good read, one of your more potent themed poems. Lots of strong emotions and feelings are connected with this topic. its a brave thing that you did by taking this topic on. I loved the poem and thought you did a great job as always. nicely done.
S.L.Kraemer
language: 5, rhythm: 5, subject: 5, tone: 5, form: 5.
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hey marcus
altough I'm fiercly pro-choice this isnt' about Roe vs Wade but about poetry and this was well written.
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1st...ya shouldnt have to explain yourself....after readin this it didnt sound like a threat ya sounded more hurt than anythin and i would have to agree with ya...some people are jus stupid others struggle to do what they think is right....i know 1st hand...im a 22 year old mother to a 3 year old and everyday is a stuggle to survive....i try my best bein a single parent but im poor as fuck and probably one of the most unstable people in this world to have a kid....but i try....i fucked up and i know it so i owned up to it...ya did a good job man
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hey JOKER
thanks for taking the time to read of course, and even more thanks for having the courage to face what's ahead of you, to take responsibility and just take everything as it comes. Congrats, and I applaud you for your actions.
Thanks for the support and leaving me such an insightful, kind, and thoughtful comment.
TTYS
MM
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Hey marcus, the poem is good, i hear the voice of the foetus urging the mother to consider deeply what she is about to do, pleading with her to realise that she has a growing baby inside that might just want to live....the structure is formal, just like the abortion procedure although this particular tone doesnt suit the voice of the pleading, desperate, unborn child....
Rarely, if ever, is the potential fathers feelings taken into consideration when i read about abortion, which is shockingly ignorant and a terrible, terrible shame....humanity ought to bow their heads in fucking disgrace...
rhet
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hey rhet
yea it is rare indeed that you hear or find a male's opinion or feelings being expressed, and even more rare taken into consideration...b/c after all it is the female's body...:S Thanks for taking the time to read and I'm glad that you enjoyed it or could find some truth in there. You're right it is crazy and shocking how you never hear the male's side of the story whenever you hear/read about any of these "News Worthy" abortions, whether in a convo, a tabloid magazine, the newspaper, or even the NEWS. All you ever hear/read, if anything, is that the father is "supportive" or "supporting" the mother's decision. Thanks for everything
TTYL
MM
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This poem really hit home for me. I could sense the anger within the stanzas and I could feel my heart skip a few beats as I read on. good work.
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There is much debate on this from a political, religious and cultural point of view. But again, there's nothing wrong with writing using a perspective outside your own beliefs. I understand you are addressing this to a particular few. But then, this being a poem, it should also be looked into in terms of its poetics.
When it comes to poems about this topic, using the unborn's perspective or voice is always powerful. You channel an impatient and angry voice, as oppose to a poignant one. Though i think as it is the poem works, i think delaying any mention of abortion would give this a punch. Rather than opening it with "don't abort me" you can delay that. You may choose to simply switch the two stanza's around. Again, this is a matter of taste, so you can ignore that suggestion.
-iphios
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