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isnt this what life is all about? feeling the thrill living the moment, it'll be over in a flash like the flashing-lights zooming-by, daddy's old station wagon and intoxication, 4in the morning where shall we go now?to the city to the park to the beach, lets drive off this pier and see the magic, lets go anywhere but home
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just an experiment
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i feel just like that sometimes. especially in the morning. i call those my 'let's drive to canada' mornings.'
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Thanks for reading this, hmm thats strange, I always feel just the opposite of that in the morning, I guess I am not a morning person
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Awesome
I agree I love how it's set up, making you Speed up when reading imagining being there with them, It is Great i think you should write more i would definetely love to read more, Awesome Job Keep it up , Sorry had forgot the applause so i deleted and reposted it 4u
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Welll thank yew verry much
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Worthwhile
Worthwhile experiment. The form makes you read faster and faster suggesting how young minds get caught up in a whirlwind of events and excitement which end up in the stupidity and risk that young people famously and repeatedly indulge in. At least that's what I get from it.
Once again, congratulations on your sense of adventure not only with your style but once more with your choice of subject. Teenage angst and love poems are hugely oversubscribed on most poetry sites. You are a breath of fresh air here. >W< -
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Thank you, you got this poem, that's exactly what i mean, and its also meant to be read fast because it's a fast poem like how fast life is and how fast the car is going, I'm glad that worked
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Do it and find out,dont drive off a pier though,jump off instead,with a lifejacket on,dont bother with the intoxication either,or the 4ams,eat lots of chocolate,lose your teeth and become a nun ha ha
I like how you structured this,it fits the poem,what you have described is most peoples idea of fun fun fun ,i imagine you have different ideas though.
bye
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Thanks, but using a life jacket wont be nearly as exciting because you don't die from it,just kidding, well I already eat chocolate but i'm not a nun so i guess that doesnt count
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