That voice from the
echoing empty tower
Does it draw you in
like a spell?
Does it belong to
a princess, or
spirits of
the sirens,
laughing over cold bodies
piled high as
stone walls?
You're already doomed,
waiting to join them,
it's why you're here,
at the foot of this tower,
willing to kill to
reveal the source.
At dawn, the sorceress
comes, "Rapunzel Rapunzel
let down your hair
so that I may climb
the golden stair"
A heavenly rope
hangs from
the only window,
The witch climbes up
the siren's stair.
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cryptic but captivating
i could try and make some sense of it only after reading your explanation in the comments...liked the way uv written it, i think maybe you can complete it. you are young and im impressed you write so nicely.
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Thank you very much, I dont really know where this came from, I love fairy tales, I guess this is kind of the "horror movie" version of Rapunzel though I hate horror movies lol
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hahaha, yes, u got it right, its the horror movie version...dont watch them but maybe youll end up scripting them it seems
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maybe.. but I'll freak myself out if that happens, did you know that the actress who played Samara in The Ring couldn't look in the mirror for a long time because she was so scared?
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thts a nice piece of trivia, i remember watching it long time now, the scariest part was when she emerges out of the tv set, my friend was laughing while i sat there frozen..lol
so we looking fwd to a poem on the count from you soon
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i cant really work out if this is metaphor or a scary fairy tale,its pretty eerie stuff:
laughing over cold bodies
piled high as
stone walls
thats my favorite line
anyway,well done but as i say im not sure if there a deeper meaning or not,you may need to tell me
bye
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Thank you, no deeper meaning, it's about when the prince hears Rapunzel's singing in the tower but he couldn't figure out how to get in until the witch comes and climbs up her hair.
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