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Don’t you see her? Sitting alone, with a few tears in her Small eyes. Can’t you see? She longs to have friends Like you? Can’t you see How smart she is? How fun her personality Her great traits and humor If only you knew her. Knew her pain and helped her. How could you be so blind? So careless? So hurtful? How? All she wants is a friend Somebody. Think.. Just think Of your actions Towards others.. |
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I hope no one treats people hurtfully. If you do, please just listen to Hero by Superchick and see how your actions towards others affect them.
Hope.
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Brings back the memory of a past life.
I use to be the kind of person that placed self before everyone else, I was a user of people and allowed them to thinnk we were close until my need was over. When that happens you never see someones true self and you have not only cheated them out of a friend, but you have cheated yourself out of a friend as well.
That was not a pleasent memory, but I dont ever want to forget who I was.
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s0urce,
Thanks for the read and comment. xD. Means a lot.
Hope.
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Very Deep Poem
This poem sends a great message to people and makes you think about people around and wondering if they could be suffering on the inside. I loved poem it speaks of so much that If I wrote it in detail I would go on forever.
Wonderful Job Hope
Distant Unknown
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wow
this poem is great
it should be eye opening to alot of people in this world.
everyone should befriend the people who look like they can really use one simply because everyone is not going to be in a happy state where everything is going to be perfect one day they will need somebody and it just might be that person that was sitting all alone who had no friends.
It seems like you put your heart into this and if you did you have a very big heart.
overall:GREAT POEM!!!!
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I should be doing this...
I feel so bad for people like this....
Very emotional and it seems like you put a lot of determination into this piece :]
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Smilie,
Thanks Smilie! I realy appriciate your comment, yet I don't mean what you mean by "I should be doing this..."
Anyways, thanks so much! You really need to post poems so I can comment!
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Thank you for the comment & read...
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It,a like this is freaking about me... I hope no one else will ever have to feel that pain, but that's impossible for the human race. As long as our kind is doing great things, we'll be doing terribly horrid things as well.
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So simple...
yet it made me cry. I understand the feeling of sitting alone only wanting a friend. Sitting alone watching others play and wondering why no one wants to play with you is an awful thing. To have other be intentionally hurtful is even worse. I experienced too much of that in my childhood. I can relate to this poem on every level. There are two things I'd suggest in reference to the poem. One on the second line I'd drop -with a few tears- to its own line and -in her- down with -small eyes- The other is the title in your list needs changed. It still lists the title as The little boy. I had that happen once and I don't remember how I fixed it. If you can't figure it out let me know and I'll help you with it. As to the overall problem addressed by the poem. That is more difficult to help with. First you must find the courage to speak out against those who are hurtful. Then you must find the courage to seek that friend you need instead of waiting for that friend to find you. Though I am only your friend here, I am your friend.
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i love that song and whenever i see someone like that or being picked on i go and save them and talk to them since im super loud and outgoing. nice message tho!
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