"Virgin", that’s what she want
you to think. Behind her
husband’s back, she be
screwin' all men in this
town, one by one, they pays
her and she in desperate
need of the money, from her
husband’s drinking an’ gambling,
losin all money he earn, she
need to feed herself don’t she.
and when the wee baby
pop out, she tell her husband
“This baby may bless you all
since it come of my blessed
virgin womb!” Then them
people of the town all
bring gold for the squealing
little pig, who save them all,
they thinks! what a laugh,
Oh Lord...
Oh, Lord, please spare this
poor girl who don’t know any
better, spare her o mighty
King of Kings, make of her your
humble servant, please, please
please have mercy on her little soul
I promise you I don’t lie no more,
promise you I believe
and cherish all things said
in the Bible, the holy Bible
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Author notes
It's a monologue, by a girl who at first jokes about the birth of Jesus and later begs to be spared on Judgment Day.
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Mel Gibson wouldn't like this!
Cee, once again you blow me away, not only with your skill but with a wisdom (and courage) that is well beyond your years. The Bible-belt brigade will have a fatwa out on you for this but I don't believe you mean it offensively and it is the poet's job to philosophize and probe the mystery as well as deepen it.
Recently Mel Gibson's movie 'The Passion' received massibe public acclaim and open-armed endorsement from the Catholic Church. I thought it was unimaginative, right-wing garbage.
Twenty years ago a film called 'The Last Temptation of Christ' was banned in many Catholic countries as blasphemous. It was a far better movie and an intelligent look at the humanity of Jesus. Your poem goes a bit farther with its look at Mary but I don't believe Jesus would have condemned her even if your (rather extreme but it makes the point) suggested version of events were the real story of his mother. The Church's need for its saints to completely blameless is ridiculous.
This is a longer review than I've written here in ages. Your poem was compelling, daring, clever, as well as downright entertaining. You and I shall both burn in Hell for this of course but I still say - Way to go!! Bloody Good Stuff >W<
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Thank you very much, I actually didn't mean to challenge the Bible or any kind of beliefs in any way. I don't really have a position on any of this yet, my family is Christian, but I'm taking extra time and thought in making a decision like that, I'm not going to become religious just because I was born into a religious family.
But anyway, that was off-topic, and what i meant to say was that my intentions were simple with this poem, and there is no underlying meaning, I'm completely neutral on this subject, I'm really not such a mature poet yet to be this "clever"
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'fess up little one!
Well, I can't see any other way to read it but the way I did. 'The virgin birth' was a cover-up that got out of hand. If you meant something else, and I'm not saying you didn't, I'd love to hear what. Do tell. Smiles >W< -
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This poem is about a girl who is skeptical about the birth of Jesus and on Judgement Day does not want to be condemned to Hell, that's why at the end she's begging for mercy. It takes place during the medieval times.
Sorry, that's all there is to it. I'm a simple girl. If I was being sarcastic, it would have been very obvious.
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Skeptical indeed!
Skepticism is the word. Skepticism about 'the Divine Word' , whether you place that skepticism in the mouth of a character you created or voiced it directly yourself, is all of the things I said it was - compelling, clever and daring. You can't absolve yourself of these charges.
Did I also mention it was entertaining? The 'voice' in which it is written is a great touch. Don't be doing yourself down about your talent. Plenty of other people out there ready to do that for you! This is anything but a 'simple' poem. Just because you found it easy to write doesn't mean it isn't very smart indeed. Kudos (whether you like it or not!) >W< -
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Thank you very much, I did come up with a very scandalous story I'll admit, I just wanted to make it clear I'm not attacking the Christian faith (I'm not, but the girl is!) It was entertaining to write as well, glad you enjoyed it!
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this is great, i really like the "Oh Lord...Oh,Lord", bit,amazing how a comma can change the whole meaning of two words
well done
bye
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Thank you verryy much, to tell you the truth i havent even thought of it like that, oops
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