They say your nice; kind
Really?
They say you aren’t mean
Yet you are
They say your helpful
I don’t think so..
So where is the one
Who they say is
Nice; kind
Helpful?
Where?
I look at you
And hope to
See that one person
But all I see
Is a
Hard, cold stare
Looking
Back at me
Author notes
I wrote this today after a teacher yelled at me because I couldn't see the board and before I told him we couldn't find my glasses, and he was all nice about it. But then today he yelled at me when I told him. He mimicked me and then yelled: "WELL THEN YOU BETTER FIND THEM!! geez"
It really hurt...
Hope.
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I like it
I agree with Brian that the action was uncalled for, I like the flow of this poem and the language creates the a cold and chilling atmosphere. Another nice write Hope
Distant Unknown
language: 5, rhythm: 5, subject: 4, tone: 4, form: 4.
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Thanks The Distant Unknown. I agree with you... *sigh* back to math again today..
Hope
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ooof
I remember those moments in school. they always had a way of making me want to cry. Funny...now I am 28 and I recently had one of those moments with my manager. I thought I'd outgrown crying over someone else's hasty comment.... learning not to take things personal has been hard to do. I like how simple this poem is, it leaves enough room for the emotions, but is too the point.
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Thank you CarlySeye for the read and wonderful comment! Yeah, right now I strongly dislike him.. of course I think he never really liked me from the start...
Hope.
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That's too bad.
That was not only uncalled for it was childish and rude. If you didn't give him a copy of this I think you should consider it along with the authors note. I liked the short lines. They work well for this poem.
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Thank you Brian...
As for giving him the poem with the authors not.. hmm. I'm not too sure.. I just found them in my old desk my dad blocked with my old dresser and bed... out in the garage.. but my eyesite has gotten worse.. my mom said she made me an appoitment next week.. not to sure though..
Thanks again Brian
Hope.
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