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I want..

I want to speak
But my mouth
Is stitched; sewed..

I want to cry
But my eye lids
Want to droop..

I want to hit
A pillow
But my muscles
Won’t budge..

I want to love
But my heart
Won’t give..

I want this pain to
Just go away
But my mind won’t let it..

I want to fade into
Thin air;
I’m not invisible..

I wish
I were
Happy..

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  • XXonlyhumanXX
    December 6, 2008

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    ME TOO!!!

    I wish i know how to be happy, but i just don't know how. LOL... This is a really good description of "numbness" lol.. IT's short but you give a lot of meanings. I like ur short groups of words. Again,you can be very descriptive in your poem!!! KEEP IT UP!!!

    language: 5, rhythm: 2, subject: 4, tone: 4, form: 3.

    • Livin.4.God
      December 6, 2008
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      Thanks for the read and comment! I really appriciate it.

      Thanks,
      Hope.


  • The Distant Unknown silver member
    December 3, 2008

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    Truly Heartfelt

    Hope this is a sad write but I know it needs to be said in order for you to cope, I understand this was hard to write. Thank you for sharing your feelings with us. I hope you will be happy soon

    Your Friend

    Distant Unknown

    language: 4, rhythm: 5, subject: 5, tone: 3, form: 5.

    • Livin.4.God
      December 3, 2008

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      Thank you The Distant Unknown for the read and and comment. It really means a lot to me.

      Thanks,
      Hope.