Be my guide
Open my heart
And take my dreams
Show me the way
Please God
I need You.
Let me surrender
Let me be Yours
Show my options
Please take me out
Of my pain, my
Misery.
Please save me
God
My Father
Please let me be
Free
And loved
Open the light
From this tunnel
Please be with me
And give me hope.
Please God,
Please.
Let me be secure
Open your arms
Wrap me in a warm embrace
Let me follow You.
Be my leader
Please
Please help me.
Let me give you
My
Life..
Author notes
I'm thinking just the title God. But I'm not sure
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inspirational
Well versed and flowed with elegance and grace. A true beleiver. Don't be so afraid. We all stumble, and fall along the way. Hope is a practice of faith.
Thank you.
language: 5, rhythm: 5, tone: 5.
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Touching
This, as most of your poetry, brought tears to my eyes. Hearing of your struggles simply causes me to hurt for you. You are such a kind and wonderful person. You deserve to have all of these prayers and so many more answered for you. I will keep you in my prayers as well. My suggested revisions are to remove the Ands at the beginnings of your lines. I know it's a hard habit to break but lines three and eighteen will stand alone and in my opinion sound better with out the Ands. I would replace the And on line twenty two with this line:
I ask you Lord
to give me hope
I believe you have stated your title within your statement that it needs a title. My Prayer.
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THIS IS BEAUTFIUL...THE PRAYER WE ALL NEED TO PRAY
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Thank you firlinterrupted16 for the read and comment!
Hope.
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Very interesting. I can't really relate to this...you know why. I think I can understand your faith better now...And this was beautiful in itself. Great job, and keep writing!
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Thanks Lake for the read and comment. Means a lot...
Hope.
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Beautiful Prayer
I loved the flow of this, its very personal and the emotions are fluently expressed. This is another beautiful write hope.
Good Job
Distant Unknown
language: 4, rhythm: 4, subject: 5, tone: 4, form: 4.
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Thank you The Distant Unknown for all your beautiful comments and writes.
Hope.
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