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You Don't Understand, Do You?

You don't understand, do you?
I wish you would open you eyes...
Just for once.
Just for me.
But you probably wouldn't do anything for me, right?
All of those things you said before
were just a lie...
A beautiful, wonderful lie..

I wish you'd see through my eyes,
or have my heart for a day
and see how hard it is just to get by.
I can't let it show even if I wanted to.
I don't want people to notice...
For people to worry...
For people like you to laugh behind my back
to watch me as I barely live through it all.

You said you cared, didn't you?
I thought I heard you say you did,
just once though...
Only once..
So I guess that doesn't matter, huh?
I wish it did, though, because when you said that
I felt complete for once...
Happy.

You don't understand, do you?
You don't understand at all...
And why would you?
I'm just a useless little girl...
Don't you remember?
The weak, pathetic girl who craves attention...
Remember that perfect month?
Gone, now...all gone.

You don't understand, do you?
You don't understand at all...

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Reviews

  • Brian Balzer Greeters member
    December 18, 2008

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    I guess I haven't read the story.

    I'm sorry that you feel this way. It is hard for me to understand in one way and so clear in another. I've felt this way in some respects. I've felt deceived and betrayed. I've been hurt and neglected. When we are feeling vunerable it is easier to be hurt. I myself am very susceptible to heartache. I give my heart freely and often pay a price. Un-deterred...I give my heart freely. I can not techically critique this poem. Its nature is too personal.


    • Inkling
      December 18, 2008
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      O.O Something that Brian doesn't have to critique. ._. Thanks, anyway. And that's because you never go on Storywrite.


  • -CrimsonTears-
    February 26
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    i like it. i thought it had good flow. nice work...