“How much time do we have?”
She murmurs against his lips As he kisses her Once Twice A million times It is always like this, the time they share The moments they extend because they dare It is so limited, and so consuming Both so hungry for power over Just one moment. When they are together She wants time to stop, just once So his unbelievably beautiful eyes can stare into hers Forever as they move that one moment Into the next. So much passion so, so little time To fit the fascination inside. Inside his arms she wishes to hide Because there is so much to discover So many new things about him she wants to know So many things she wants him to know about her But there is never Enough time for this All thoughts are lost within the unbelievable kiss Inside the moment, the obliviousness to anything else but themselves Is apparent to both of them And she knows she’s not the only one Who feels the moment slip from their grasp As quickly as it comes “How much time do we have?” She whispers in the darkness, against his lips While the trees shimmer outside the window, crystalline Sheer and masculine Like gloomy, towering emerald spies, smirking Watching their every move. The sun barely shines through, casting a splinter Of blindness into the room, bathing the walls with amber waves And the love that she craves Blankets her body with poise. The carpet bare underneath flawless skin As his hands find hers And intertwine, filling her with warmth Laced with the love that will always exist Born from the first time they kissed But will never be enough To keep that one amazing Breath taking Trembling moment Inside their power. Time ticks by, hour by hour “How much time do we have?” She whispers in his ear Her voice engraved with fear As they breathe as one Beneath the obscured sun Their hearts pound in their chests, wildly After that one moment Has passed Too fast The thrill of rebellion A rule that’s been broken One too many times But they don’t think twice about it They don’t regret Everyone else is oblivious. The time consumes them Their breathing fills the empty room with resonance Reverberating off the naked walls Creating infatuation without words Exposing feeling after feeling Emotion after emotion In each indulgent move that is made They both know not to be afraid Fulfilling desire after burning desire Like fire Unable to be destroyed Something they cannot avoid Singeing the air with the passion they create As the night wears on. She trembles as his fingers Taste her Her heart craves more, only more “How much time do we have?” She whispers to him, her lips caressing his Thoughtlessly He grazes her with his eyes, a dazzling sea green More beautiful than anything she’s ever seen Wild with exhilaration Taking in every inch Of her Sadness filling the room as her Question echoes blindly off the walls Recoiling around in graceful, radiant arcs He gazes at her Lying beneath him Pondering Only wishing That time would stop He inhales the tension Whispers to her “Not enough, babe.” |
Author notes
My boyfriend and I have been through so much together, and we have grown a stronger relationship from it. The passion we feel and have when we are together is amazing to me and I had to write a poem on it. Please tell me your thoughts on this poem and tell me if I need to change anything. I would appreciate the advice.
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Comments
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Poems of the heart touch many.
Love is such a strong emotion that it's hard for many not to write about it at some point. I think you've shown the magnitude and overpowering desire so spend as much time as possible with someone when you love them deeply. I like the image this paints for me. I can remember times like this though it has been many years. I'm not a fan of starting linse with And or But unless it's necessary to add a beat or connect it to the previous line. I look at the line and ask if it can stand on it's own, or if I can find another word that will replace that word or is it needed. Here is an example of one that I think could stand alone:
The time consumes them
And their breathing fills the empty room with resonance
I would leave this And off and just start the line with Their. Now this is an example of one that I would leave:
He inhales the tension
And whispers to her
The length of the line controls the impact of the message and the flow of the read. I try to keep them close to even but that's me. I'm not saying it's a rule. I've seen poets use lines of different lengths several times. Good write. Keep up the good work.
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Once again, totally strong. I think you have great skill.

