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Me

I'm a flower fading,
I'm a girly waiting.
I'm a helpless lady,
I'm a hopeful baby.
I'm a geek, a nerd, a loser too,
I'm nothingness I know it's true.
I'm a reader,
I'm a leader.
I'm a bear in a cave,
I'm a knight and I'm a knave.
I'm a draw-er and a sketcher,
I'm a baby bottle fetcher.
I'm not nice but I'm not mean,
and I always seem to have a scheme.
I'm weird yet Cool,
I'm brlliant not a fool.
I'm silent yet I can be loud,
I'm always sure to blend into a crowd.
I'm a crazy,
I'm a lazy.
I'm a lover not a hater,
I'm so not a traitor.
I'm ok at sports when I really try,
I hate my life it makes me want to cry.
I'm always moving never still,
I always have my friends at will.
That's mee.

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Comments

  • Hanah gold member
    January 26, 2009
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    I like the way you've described yourself.Can relate too.Flows well.


  • BJ Colvin
    January 10, 2009

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    Oh really like this. You paint quite the picture for us through the images and descriptions, such as a knight and knave. One suggestion though is in the line "I'm not nice but I'm not mean," I think it might work a bit better with the flow if you drop the but. It kind of makes you stop and expect a turn in the poem but the poem continues on. Just a suggestion. Though I must say there is nothing wrong with being a nerd! ^^ Great read