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I Saw A Little Dirt Road

It zigzagged off in adventure
It took me through whispering fields
And through hills of crumpled velvet
Where I slept overnight in a copse

I meandered through cities and towns
Charming small villages which inspired paintings
Loud noises of city markets
Buildings stretched into the clouds
I had two drinks at the "Slapping Fish Inn"

I Went down filthy dark alleys
Where men wearing shoes with flappy sole pieces
and clothing totally threadbare
Were living in cardboard boxes
Under dingy lights of a lonesome depot

I saw jealous lovers
become selfish strangers
And watched as their hearts made of stone
Crumbled and fell at my feet
Their love now turned to dust

I traveled to the best
And the worst
Of all possible worlds
As quickly as a topless dancer
Snatches an old man's dollar

What was happening here
This sudden, wonderful, blinding knowledge
Flowing through my brain?
It took more than intelligence
To solve this Rubik's Cube

It was as though my soul
Had suddenly been unchained
Like every emotion in the galaxy
Had wormed its way to my heart

Then, of course, I awoke
With a sense of astonishment
Mystery solved, but what brought
A dream of such strength? There it was
'Neath the pillow, a book of poems
Lay under my head

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  • Gagiikwe
    January 18, 2009

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    Shunpiking the recesses of our minds

    "It took me four days to hitchhike from Saginaw....They've all gone to look for America" Simon & Garfunkle ... A delightful career through your synapses Richard: Ferlinghetti, Sandberg, Frost, etc,etc - all brought to my mind by association with your word pictures. Some wry lines there! Snatching dollars, indeed!

    My only querry: could it read more vibrantly without the capitals beginning each line?

    language: 5, rhythm: 2, subject: 4, tone: 4, form: 1.

  • oxymoron270
    December 24, 2008
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    aww ilike the ending!