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I Don't Want You Anymore

I want to take a picture of my life
And hang it up for all the world to see
Then tear it into tiny pieces
Just like you did to me

This picture would be black and white
The colors of your heart
Upon my face would be a smile, despite
The way you tore me apart

In the frame you’d hold my hand
And mouth the words I love you
And our perfect faces would look so grand
But no one would know what you put me through

The trees behind us would sparkle and shine
Despite our paling memory
An evil mystery, a broken design
To describe the times you lied to me

In this picture, I can’t help but wonder
Why isn’t she in it?
I wish this picture would show your blunder
And what you won’t admit

If this picture had subtitles it would scream the hate
That you so willingly force upon me
The many times I have had to create
A world where we agree

In this picture, I wish they could see
The bags under your eyes
From your nights of so called “shopping sprees”
And the handfuls of your lies

In this picture, they can’t see the bruise
You left upon my right eye
From that night you drank a little too much booze
And told me I should die

This picture doesn’t show your love for me
Because it doesn’t exist
Maybe someday I will find the key
To what in life I have missed

Now
You take this picture from me and laugh
Because we look so happy together
But we aren’t
And you know it on the inside
It’s something that I cannot even begin to hide
Holding that picture in your hand you look
A little powerless, for once
It reminds me of what you took
From me, from us
You went back to her
Every
Single
Night
And told her you were lonely
If only
She knew the truth behind your lies
Can’t she see me in your eyes?
I’m that whore you so despise
Surprise
You can’t get rid of me
Because you were the one that came after me
And don’t deny
You know, you should show her that picture
I want to see what her eyes do when she sees your fingers
Wrapped tightly around mine
I want to see if her anger lingers
Long enough for her to say, “That’s fine”
Then maybe she’ll pull her shirt back on and say
“I can’t be with you, there is no way”
“You have to leave, you cannot stay”

So then you’ll run to me in distress
Saying, oh I am such a mess
“Take me in, baby, give me your love
You are my angel sent from above”
I’m not going to fall for your selfish lies
I don’t care
If they are true or not, don’t you dare
Tell me that this was all my fault
As far as I’m concerned, our love has come to a sudden halt
You can beg all you want, baby you can plead
But that’s not gonna make me satisfy your need
Your black heart is full of sparkling emerald greed
And I can’t believe you managed to mislead
Me into thinking you were true to your word
But it turns out I am not what you preferred
And I know all about what you have done in the night
Thinking you can leave and everything will go right
Well honey, there's the door
I know I'm not the little princess you tell me you adore
I’m done being your second hand white trash whore
Just take your things and leave, baby I don’t want you anymore

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  • rhetorica gold member
    July 10, 2009
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    Hi...i will comment as you have asked...for me it dragged on and the story is too common but i guess its good to let these emotions out....a poem should say a lot in only a few words....you are doing the right thing by leaving this scumbag...good luck to you.

    rhet


    • Dying Youth
      July 10, 2009
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      Thanks for your comment..
      You're right.. it did drag on which is why I was surprised at earlier comments. I'm sorry you did not enjoy it. This is not one of my best peices so I wasnt really expecting a better comment anyway.
      Thanks.


  • Jas.12
    July 10, 2009

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    wow!!

    I how could I not comment!! Girll that was great I've dont think I've ever been hooked into a poem that way. My nose was touching the freakin computer screan! I loved that!!!! Definetly keep waiting. I'll be waiting for your next peice of writing.

    Power to your pen,
    -Jas.

    language: 5, rhythm: 5, subject: 5, tone: 5, form: 5.


    • Dying Youth
      July 10, 2009
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      Aww Thank you so very much for your comment. I was not expecting good ones at all but I am glad this made such an impact on you. I've always wanted that. I will try to keep writing. This is an old poem and I dont know if I've got it in me anymore...

      Thank you so much.

      Haylee


  • flaquita silver member
    July 10, 2009
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    You go girl power to you you better get to writing again im hooked lol
    ~Erika~


    • Dying Youth
      July 10, 2009
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      Lol Thanks Flaquita. As soon as I get my head together and some free time I will hun. I appreciate your comment.

      Haylee


  • kittyeaglepig gold member
    July 10, 2009

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    I wouldn't usually sit down to read a poem of that length.. but it kept my attention.. it has a good rythm to it.. liked it!


    • Dying Youth
      July 10, 2009
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      Thank you. It's definitely not one of my best, but I appreciate your comment, hun.

      Loves!

      Haylee

  • johnboy010
    December 25, 2008

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    Great

    Whoa, that was really intense. Loved the story and the rhyme scheme. It was a great poem, Hands down.

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