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Lovely

Close your eyes now darling baby
when you open them everything will be lovely
Hush now listen to my lullaby
The ravens will coo as the dusk breaks
let the sirens sing you to sleep

Pretty darling baby listen to me
when you awake everything will be lovely
Hush now there's no need to cry
feel these little petals prick
eyelash kisses sweet as honey

Mermaids in the ocean watch you sleep
when you adrift everything will be lovely
pretty darling demon butterflies
sing sweet dreams
meet me there

you will see
everything will be lovely

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  • rhetorica gold member
    December 31, 2008

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    This is disguised wonderfully,it you were naive enough you could be forgiven for thinking that this is really sweet when in fact its quite the opposite,i get the impression its about child abuse,a harrowing subject that you have dealt with in a unique and inimitable fashion
    amazing writing cee,your talent is exceptional

    rhet

    • cee
      December 31, 2008
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      Thanks!! To be honest I wasnt thinking about child abuse, I was thinking about some fantasy nightmare where the mother strangles her baby or something, but child abuse makes more sense