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Hope


The rain trickled through the branches,
down the trees reaching for the sky.
I look up at the elegant limbs,
breathing out deeply in a sigh.

Tears fall down my face,
just as easily as the rain.
There is no life in my tears though,
just lots of pain.

I wander among the flowers,
wondering how they can bloom so bright.
My life used to be the same,
then someone turned out the light.

I'm enclosed in a terrifying darkness,
a never ending torment.
Nature is my refuge,
my only despairing pain vent.

I used to love a girl,
she stole my breath away.
She captured my heart,
and for it I still pray.

She never gave it back,
just took it away with her.
Leaving me alone and empty,
my life a smooth grey blur.

I still wish that she would come,
that she might still give it back.
But slowly that hope slips away,
Like the world turning an ever darker black.

Suddenly under the trees,
a beam of sunshine there.
She stood under the light,
her skin glowing fair.

She smiled towards me,
and slowly gave back what was mine.
My heart began to heal,
and my life began to shine.

The light invaded my darkness,
driving out all the horrors within.
She ran towards me and embraced me,
as my face lit up in a grin.

We danced beneath the sky,
as the sapphire rain began to slow.
Petals showered down upon us,
as tender as the love I remember and know.

She gave me back my life,
the key back out into reality.
We vowed never again to part,
as I beamed with new-found vitality.

I had hope.

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  • BJ Colvin
    January 10, 2009

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    Oh I like it a bunch. Especially the second to last stanze. "We danced beneath the sky, as the sapphire rain began to slow." Sapphire rain beautiful imagery. Thanks for the great read!^^


    • Savage
      January 10, 2009
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      Yeah, I like descriptive stuff. Thanks for reading and commenting.


  • daydreamer245
    January 10, 2009

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    this poem was really well written so the emotions flow as your reading it. I aslo liked the references to nature and how you used them to convey what you were feeling!

    • Savage
      January 10, 2009
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      Thank you very much! I enjoy using nature as part of my thinking.


  • Siaynoq
    January 10, 2009

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    Well it's a beautiful sentiment, if a little cliche'd. The last line of stanza two would work better with 'only' instead of 'just.'

    I would also say that too many burgeoning poets fall into the trap of thinking a poem HAS to rhyme, and end up compromising the message of the poem simply to cram it into a constant rhyme scheme. It may help you to practice with free verse.

    Sam


    • Savage
      January 10, 2009
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      Hmm... I've never tried free verse, some I've read still have a rhythm that I can't do. Thank you for pointing out my typo, and for reading and commenting again.

      I'll get around to free verse sometime.

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