I have a little telescope
to look into when I'm lonely
on the other side's the world
only I can see
you're my favorite to look at
you have the sweetest curls
and when you swallow that key
only I can see
you've a box full of stories
a closet full of secrets
and till they spill into the streets
only I can see
so say your prayers
and plan the weeks
close your eyes but
you'll never be safe from me
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This is a very interesting poem. Quite different. I especially like the third stanza.
language: 3, rhythm: 3, subject: 3, tone: 3, form: 3.
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Mildly creepy poem when you think about the fact that the speaker is spying on the person but I liked it. I think personally I like the second stanza the best. Where the speaker talks about how she is their favorite to look at so makes you think he looks at more, And when she swallows the key good aspect.
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thank you, it's supposed to be a creepy poem. like the person is being spied on and doesnt even know it
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hey cee,i guess this is about voyeurs with telescopes who like to peer inside other peoples houses,i cant say i noticed any rhyming problems at all mainly because the poem flowed and was interesting to read,my favorite stanza is the penultimate one
great poem,well done
rhet
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Thanks!!
it's about secrets and lies and scandals and how they'll sneak up on you if you dont watch out
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