My breath whistles down the steel shaft
I clench it tightly within my palms, eerily steady
I let my fingers glide across it's length
Engraving an image of it's outline in my mind
I can feel my heart pulsating, the pressure like lead galloping through my veins
Ready to catapult itself out of my chest
My hearing turns inside out, I listen to the sound of my body pumping adrenaline through itself, the mesmerizing placidity of it's necessary functions
My entire body turns cold, all senses amplified
I close my eyes, clamping them tightly
Corneal pressure relaxing my anticipation
I slide my hand down, framing my fingers gently around the trigger
My thoughts roll around in my mind, more frantic then an ocean
Simplicity overwhelming rationality
I clasp my fingers tighter
Bouts of reassurance
The cool jab of steal under my chin
Consumed entirely by adrenaline
No longer cognizant
Eyes shut tighter
Hands gripping harder
Bum Bum
Bum Bum
BUM-BUM BUM-BUM
BUM-BUM BUM-BUM
.::Bang::.
...Euphoria...
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This is a lesson in how to write about death/suicide,its the best poem on these themes i have ever read,you take me inside this persons brain,the first line sucked me straight into the poem,its structure is so good as it gets frantic near the end like this persons thoughts,i love the bum bum-bum heart beat conclusion as the persons fantasy comes to an end,there are several erotic implications in this piece too but whether you intended that or not i dont know,
I think this is up there with your very best
very well done kitten
rhet
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Thank you so much for the comment! When I was writing this I kind of noticed some parts that seemed like erotic references, which wasn't intentional, but I just decided to keep writing it. Thanks for the comment, much appreciated.
-Kitten
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