Memories...
flitting
and
fading
like smoke,
twisting and writhing into the air...
Lying on the
tip of your tongue,
yet hiding from the knowledge
that they bring...
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Author notes
My first free verse, and I experimented with different fonts and styles.
Um...?
Comments
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This is beautiful!
You could probably add more too it but it sounds complete the way
it is too!
Great job!
I loved it!!!
-Krista
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Hmm....This is a very good start. I especially like your format and where you italicized some words. I think you should elaborate on it a bit more though...
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good
good but too short needs to be longer keep writing -
very good but too short! lol sometimes short is good makes the reader want to see more keep writing
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I'm impressed.
I really didn't know what to expect when I saw your age. This is very well done. I like the way you formatted this with the words floating away from the flame like the smoke which would rise and drift away. I love the way you used the different fonts to show your emphasis where you wanted it. I think perhaps you should experiment more often. As to the message itself of the poem, I think you have chosen your words wonderfully to show the meaning you intended. I think the picture of the candle is a very nice touch. Great job overall.
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