alone.
together.
three
is a number.
a threesome
get broken
into
a twosome
and that leaves
a onesome
which isn't a word.
there is a twosome
there is one
alone
the one
was together
with the twosome
before
when there was a
theesome
they were
together
the twosome's
together
the one is alone.
Comments
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it is sad.
yet so incredibly funny at the same time.
i think the suggestion of splitting up the poem differently is a good idea. Maybe you can even write it as one long thing..a series of short independent sentences.
ira -
I really like this, Mar. It's lonely, but I love it.
I just have one suggestion. You might want to add a couple periods in some lines, just to seperate it into sort of verses.
Maybe in
"and that leaves
a onesome
which isn't a word" You could add a period after "isn't a word." That's my favorite line, by the way. Even if you don't add the periods, it's still really good.
I'm just wondering about the inspiration here. Message me about it, I have a couple speculations. The one from before again, maybe? But who's the third person?
It's amazing Mar,
-Colin
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