Love
Lo and behold,
Of all the things that could’ve happened. Your sweet
Voice
Echoed through my head
Author notes
this is for my bf, wa-ya!
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Love
Well verse. Such a great peace of art. Short and sweet. To the point.
language: 5, rhythm: 5, subject: 5, tone: 5, form: 5.
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Love
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Succinct
This is my second attempt to comment on this one. I was about to submit the first time and hit something that took me to another site. This is so simple yet says so much. Some people wouldn't understand the meaning of hearing someones voice in your mind when you needed it most. They wouldn't understand how a seemingly simple sentiment could echo through your mind and fill your heart with joy. I understand. I do wonder as to why you left that one line so long. I would tend to split that line after that and happened. Just my thoughts though. Very sweet poem. I'm sure he will love it.
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Short but nice . A nice way to express your love.
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