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Tonight

I want to hit
a bucket of golf balls
hit them at midnight
off the front lawn
over the oak trees
into the stars
out towards the road
no one drives home

I want to follow
fighting the forest
give up the honor
beg for relief
pray against demons
swing at myself
put up a trophy
on the top shelf

I want to hurt
until I can heal
summon all sources
never revealed
face off the dark
follow the flight
of any ball hit
into tonight





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  • October 22, 2009
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    pray against demons?

    maybe the praying
    will help
    maybe it won t

    what will likely help most
    is to get really angry
    if you haven t already

    i ve found that anger
    if used in constructive ways
    can be very empowering

    maybe you could write it out
    in a place no one can see

    not sharing it with anyone
    while the pain is fresh

    ----

    most of all
    maybe you can escape for a while

    there s nothing like
    the constant reminder
    of someone who hurt you

    to make the hurt last
    all the longer

    ----

    i hope you do heal
    i hope we both do

    ----

    then again
    this was from january

    so chances are
    you re already better

    at least i hope so


  • Jas.12
    June 23, 2009

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    Good

    I really liked this poem. I found myself edging closer to my computer screen as I read the words.

    my favorite part:

    "I want to hurt
    until I can heal"

    good job.

    Power to the pen,
    -Jas.