robert!
Hello? Hello? Anybody there? Echo!
going out to the car to get my wine key....
Oh... uh... Hello
no....reallly where is the corkscrew...
Bob : playing golf.....brb
i'm fucked
ah!!!
found it
like a tiny little orgasm....
au wine
and au bowl
auju
my own
deja
you know
u kant hide out there forever
ps.....
i'm drinking......
Author notes
I found a place in my computer where all my IM conversations were stored...After realizing that some of them had a poetic flow to them...This is the product....And I erased the rest of the IM's... to destroy the evidence! And told the computer to stop saving them...
wadda ya think
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Eh, it was ok. I didn't really like the whole IM conversation theme.
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I'd have to agree with Dave
Though it is a thoughtful concept, I think it's very strictly limited to your own perception.
However, I did percieve a tone of forgotteness, or sense of being ignored throughout the lines.
That may be my interpretation, though, and not your intent.
However, it is intricate in its own way, and has a design I have not until now seen.
Also, you did hit every category on the head. I enjoy that, because some people don't know what they're writing.
Bravo,
-Regards, Alex
tone: 4, form: 5.
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hey algoressister
this is a famous method used by William Burroughs who wrote his book Naked Lunch this way, your poem and the book are a bit too cryptic for me, altough it did set a mood.
dave
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