I checked your facebook today
You're looking for
Friendship
A Relationship
Facebook Boyfriend? I don't think so!
****this facebook relationship!
I want your face
I need your hands
Why don't you want that?
Are you that unconfident?
Get some frickin' self-esteem
This ain't cool
And it ain't over until I say so
I wanna watch your lips move
The expression
Your eyes blink, my reflecion in them
I need to feel your warmth
It better be a phase
I'm not gonna wait by the door
I ain't gonna wait up on you
All I have to say is
Don't let the door hit ya where the good Lord split ya
Yours truly,
Miss O'Malley
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Huh....
I really don't know, but i didn't get it but I LOVE IT!!! i don't really know what's happening, but it's making me laugh and my smiles are all the way to my ear!!!! I should sto reading this poem so i can have a FULL head!!!lol..JK
Anyways, it's AWESOME!!!!
language: 4, rhythm: 4, subject: 4, tone: 3, form: 3.
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gee, thanks! glad you liked it.
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i like it although i think the last stanza makes you sound like you don`t really mean what you are saying,(imho)its not strong enough....he sounds like a vain idiot so my advise is to dump the loser and join a dating site...
see you later
rhet
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thanks. now that i re-read it, the last stanza does sound kinda lame. dating sites? naa. no thanks. i prefer a more natural encounter. the guy can get vain, but i think he's goin through a phase...he'd better come out of it. that's all im gonna say.
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