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Impeckable

This is a perfeck peace of literter.
Proper gramer. Impeckable,. punctuation]
and of corse no spelling erurers.
Allthough its dry and i talk abut nothing?
and it has no good substunce
It's still a perfeck peace of literer.
Because I fucking say it is.

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  • rhetorica gold member
    February 3, 2009

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    Who am I to disagree,sounds like you are a little pissed of at the readers who don`t get your poems at all,they underestimate your intellect and simply think your work is exaggerated and pretentious when in fact it is your natural style...its frustrating for me when readers dont embrace your work....anyway the poem is funny and i love the last line and the expletive is essential

    ttfn

    rhet


  • Iorek silver member
    February 3, 2009

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    I think this is pretty much half the message I just sent you, but expressed as a poem. Brava!

    2 - *gramer proper? You don't really have any grammar mistakes (although you say you do) aside from punctuation, so if you just fuck up a couple of bits of syntax.

    4 - You know, the "its" is my favourite mistake. Cause I'm pretty sure a lot of people won't notice.
    - Currently I'm sort of on the fence about the mistakes in this poem. I don't know if they'd work better as comic and exagerratedm, as they are currently, or if they were all realistic spelling mistakes that people make lots (you might entirely disagree, but "porper gramer" seems like quite a realistic mistake, whereas I can't see many people accidently rtyping "erurers")

    7 - I know it's deliberate, but I'm just not sure about having the last line mistake-less. I like the swearing, I think that expresses the coarseness of the logic in a very literal way, but... hmm, I think as it is it almost implies that the person can write perfectly well, but is choosing not too, whereas I think what you're wanting is that they just can't be arsed.


    Hehe, well that certainly cheered me up mid-morning before I go back to trying to translate Sophocles (seriously, those ancient Greeks are a nightmare). Short and funny, what can one say to that?

    All the best,
    Chris

    language: 5, rhythm: 3, subject: 4, tone: 4, form: 4.