Meaning of smile
I learned through others
Never had I felt
How sweet it would be
What is happiness –
I have seen smiling faces
I heard from them
Saying ‘I’m very happy’
Is ‘very’ a big word
Why do people use it?
How large, wide and huge
This ‘very’ would be?
I wondered thousand times
I don’t know the answer
If there is an answer
I would like to say
I’m very sad, very bad
Very sorrowful and very gloomy
God, bless me with something
That is ‘very’ happiness
I will forget all my painful past
‘Very happily’ and live very beautiful life
Author notes
Prayer of a Child Labor
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i hope this isn't so?
i hope ur not really this sad,
it is a good poem, the grammar is killing me though,
but it is kind a kinda sad and sweet..
i honestly am not one to criticize a non-rhymin poem,
but that does not mean i can't enjoy it now does it
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Nice job displaying the innocent sadness *thumbs up*
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Hey Life,
Thanks for stopping by and your generous comment. Grammar is not a suite for the one who doesn't know what 'VERY' is.
Thanks again
-Kiddy
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I thought that this poem was well written. I do hope that it is not true for you. I wish you all the happiness you can stand. Nicely done.
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hey Kiddy
this has so much innocence mixed with extreme sadness and it is beautiful throughout, it`s so pure..the only part i would suggest changing is "very bad" because you are not very bad in this poem
for me, you have taken the definition of "very" to a higher level,
i loved this poem
well done
rhet
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i loved this one this one just amazing great job
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aawwwww...
i hope "very" much happiness for you, kiddy and hope also that this piece is just something that you had to write and not what you are feeling...because every person deserves to be happy... -
A Very Big Word Indeed
Hello daughter:
I would suspect that Vijay thinks you should now be very happy and very blessed!
As the Christian Bible says: "I pray that you, being rooted and grounded in love, may have power to grasp...how wide and long and high and deep is the love of Christ, and to know this love that surpasses knowledge."
language: 3, rhythm: 2, subject: 3, tone: 3, form: 2.
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Very Heartbreaking...
to think of you not knowing the meaning of very happy. I hope that this is not a true reflection of your feelings. I truly hope that it was simply an excercise in poetry. I wish for you to live a very beautiful life as well.
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