It’s not over yet.
Just one more night
With the pain and questions
Just one more night with you.
Everything you’ve ever meant to me
So much confusion
The anger at myself
Just one more night of this pain
That’s all I need.
Don’t walk away and leave me empty
So empty, so cold
Isn’t this
Better than
That?
Isn’t anything better than that?
I just want to hate myself for one more night
While you go on not caring
Let me want you again
Don’t make me walk away.
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Beautiful
That was really insightful, it showed your true emotions. I thought it had a blend of feelings and the truth of the perspective. -
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Thank you.
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Amazing. My favourite poem of your's. Very bleak and emotional. The ending is great. My fave line is Don't make me walk away.
Great stuff. Short poems are your thing.
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Cool- It's interesting. Ummm..
I like the general poem and the beggining. I might develop the ending a bit more:
Don’t walk away and leave me empty
So empty, so cold
Isn’t this
Better than
That?
Isn’t anything better than that?
I just want to hate myself for one more night
While you go on not caring
Let me want you again
Don’t make me walk away.
I'm not sure how, but... It just doesn't really feel like it sticks.
Nice though!
xx
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Thanks HK and I agree about the ending, that needs some work.
Cheers!
-Colin
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