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Bleeding Ink

I've got ink pouring out of my bones,
It's actually my friend when I'm alone.
Paper soaking through,
Finally i give up and draw on my skin.
That's better.
It goes over my hand..
Down my arm..
So much of it..
People saying I should be a tatoo artist..
Shit..
I love the ink on me..
It's a part of me..
Screaming to people leave me alone..
I'm a freak..
Not giving me any chance at all..
Guess whaty?

I don't care..
Ink is my life..
I breathe it..
Live it...
Bleed it..

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Comments


  • flaquita silver member
    October 20, 2009
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    Hey Ray Ray,
    I liked this one....

    ~ERIKA~

  • Brian Balzer Greeters member
    February 22, 2009

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    Interesting.

    I think you have conveyed your feelings to the reader.You have a typo. Guess what has a y on the end of what. There are a few suggestions that I would make. You might consider breaking down some of the longer lines like this:
    I've got ink pouring
    out of my bones,
    It's actually
    my friend
    when I'm alone.
    Paper soaking through,
    Finally i give up
    draw on my skin.
    I think you could find something more fitting than shit for line ten. Perhaps: I can't tell you how much. As a general rule when you use ellipsis points you use three of the...in addition I think maybe you have over used them which reduces the effect. Keep writing.