You can write all the
Sleezy poems you want
I'm not one of them
When You're gone
IS that what you'll
be remembered for
Well, I'm not one of them
Maybe your momma never
never gave you
the kick in the pants
You needed
Of course, I'm not one of them
Whatever happened to responsibility
and care for human kind,
Why can't you keep your pants zipped
And whatever happened to real poetry?
Honestly, I can say I'm not one of them,
So as for me and my unappreciated work
I'm not one of you so I'm gone
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see ya guys, keep your sleezy dirty poems
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Miss,
The sleezy poetry you refer to is called "Mainstream Hip Hop"
I believe you are speaking of rap, my dear. Perhaps, by chance, you may come across a literate person suitable to your tastes. However, in response to your poem, for free verse, it was not bad.
The repitition of "I'm not one of them" added a nice touch.
However, in regards to that, I did not fully understand as to what you were not one of.
Are you not one of those poems?
Are you not one of those girls of whom may be swooned by the foul-mouthed rhyme scheme of rap?
Perhaps you may clarify as to what you are not?
I understand your attitude towards the male gender, but take a look around, my friend.
You'll find that for every apple with a worm in it, there are a dozen that are untouched.
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i was surprised when you said i was referring to rap/hip hop. not to be rude, but it wasn't what i was referring to. actually, i was referring to other people's poems that were just poems, but i suppose i can understand what you were thinking and why. the repitition was supposed to mean that i was not one to enjoy perverted poems and neither would i participate in reading them, commenting on them, writing them, etc. like the rest of the people. ill definitely take a look at your poetry if you want me to. thanks for taking the time to read!
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Of course :)
Anytime. And please, do read at least my poem, "Unspoken Thoughts"
It's definitely a sing-songy poem, full of teenage hormones, but it serves a point. You may enjoy it. It is a bit long, however :/
Many of my other poems are a bit more on the drastically dark side. But you may enjoy those as well
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love this!! so truthful!
and i totally agree!! ;]
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Hey, Miss O Malley
I see your age is only seventeen and as such if you're parents are doing their jobs, they've encouraged you to avoid getting hung up in sex outside of a committed relationship. Commitment in my opinion is best signified by marriage. I was raised the same way and very religiously so when people got frank about sex, I'd usually head the other way as I was prejudiced to think "the devil" was at work in it. But I may have misconceived.
Sexual drives aren't evil, they're physiological. The devil doesn't give anyone sexual urges, biology does. Where things get twisted is when the proper respect is failed to be given this intimate act. There's two ways of talking about sex, with respect and without respect. The talking about sex is not in and of itself wrong. Sex is a huge part of life and health and happiness. Those who don't have a healthy sex life usually aren't very happy and healthy in other ways. Plus, without it, none of us would be here today. Some people use humor to address sexual issues because there is at times a great deal of humor to be found in many of society's misconceptions as to sex. I think the danger lies in treating people as sexual objects and nothing else. When people lose sight that sex is but a manifestation of love that must be there first. So many today believe that they can sex themselves into love, and it's just not gonna happen. Love is a spiritual thing that then leads to affection and then is sanctified by commitment and consummation of that commitment to create a family, the main biological purpose of sex being procreation.
Anyway, it can be a little rough for young eyes to see sex so frankly discussed, especially when they've been encouraged to avoid it until later. Sage advice. You don't have to read the writes. And, you shouldn't have to worry about that. All adult writes should be categorized as such and one thing I think that needs to be changed here is that comments on adult writes are still visible outside of those adult writes. I comment on a variety of subjects,but often find myself shying away from adult writes that I certainly have an opinion on, but am concerned as I know my comments are visible to all. I think that ought to change as I tire of self-censoring all the time. There are very adult issues that one ought to able to discuss without the concern for offending others. However, if one is offended, one ought not read. I believe in freedom of expression for everyone, but the expression needs to be properly categorized. If you feel that some writes are improperly categorized, or not at all, ticket the item to a moderator and they will see to it that it is taken care of.
Anyway, relax, take a deep breath, you're not going to hell for seeing sex discussed freely, it's a big part of life. Respect is the key, and shy away from those who demean it by objectification.
Cheers, and I hope anything I said was not taken offense to.
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i dont wear oversized tee-shirts but i would wear one that said "poetry badass" i'm against censorship thats all. there is more meaning behind what i write beyond the profanity, but some people fail to see it i guess.
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Some people don't want to see it, Ryan.
And that's their right. Nobody is censoring you by asking you to categorize your work properly.
al
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i guess my real problem is what you just said...the disrespect for sex. and when people don't categorize it right so i end up clicking on a poem that's not categorized as adult. i start reading it and realize that i shouldn't be. and all that i've read was just junk i didn't wanna see. i've learned what writers are 'safe' and which are not
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i'm guessing i'm not 'safe' hahaha
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Hey Ryan...
Lemme tell you what's "unsafe".
When you fail to categorize properly, even after you've been asked repeatedly, and then deliberately write sexual things addressed to "anyone"(as your poem in question here addressed anyone with "at least one leg and a p***y", mind you this then refers to females of all ages) and take pleasure in the questionable infamy that ensues by admitting such, you are in trouble. Why?
Hmmm...let's see...you're currently on probation; you have conceivably engaged in lewdness with a minor; you have conceivably engaged in lewdness with a minor over the internet which means that you have just crossed every possible state line in the committing of an offense which brings with the title: "federal offense". Every correspondence here is saved, saved, saved. Perhaps you ought to categorize, hmmm?
Now, do I think you're a paedophile? No, you're just young and lacking knowledge. Just do everyone a favor, Ryan, and put your work where it belongs: in it's proper category. It's rather humorous to watch you nash about on a poetry site like it contributes to your machismo somehow.
Here, I have something for you: I'm going to print you a button that you can stick to your over-sized shirt. The button will be emblazoned in bold letters "POETRY BADASS". You wear that proudly and mebbe then you can get you some satisfaction and not feel the need to giggle as you talk dirty to anyone and everyone who happens across you. And somehow you're a ladies man? I really don't see how that can be...where do you find the time? Just put your stuff where it belongs. Consideration is never a bad thing, why don't you give it a shot?
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haha. i think i scared her
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Poetry comes in all styles, forms, and languages. We live in a world in which freedom of speech is a gift as well as law. People write what they feel, as the mood strikes them. I hope your poem is not a true story but just an expression of your freedom of speech. I respect that. I take no offense to your poem. I look upon it as a way of expressing yourself. It's a good poem, too. The point comes across well. I hope you'll stick around and keep an open mind when reading other poet's writings. There's no need to get on the offensive. It's just poetry. And poetry is an expression of oneself or one's idea about something. I'd love to read your work and see how you express yourself. Poets vary in their writings: one poem may be sweet whereas another may be sleezy as you call it. It's nothing to get upset about. Just appreciate poetry for what it is -- poetry. And stick around. You might learn something. Goodness knows, I sure have.
Birdie
language: 3, rhythm: 3, subject: 4, tone: 3, form: 3.
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so right birdie. glad to see my fans are sticking up to my right to free speech haha
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...I hate you. You said what I wanted to say better than I could say it.
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My personal opinion of your poem: At its most basic parts, art is simply freedom of expression. Expressing your perversions is part of that expression. What gives you (or me, complaining) the right to downplay that?
My pseudo-professional opinion of your poem: You stick to your subject well, you don't spend any time dilly-gagging away with nonsense. Your poem reads like a valid complaint against something you honestly think is worth complaining about, and you get that point out very clearly. Poetically, by itself it's rather plain, with nothing but the bare-bones of what you needed to convey. The flow is fine, but it doesn't do anything to break any molds, it's spoken exactly like it reads, the nuances of line-breaks taking care of pauses, with a few capitals thrown in to suggest stressing. Editing was done well, nothing I can see that needs proofreading. Its as correct as it gets.
I'm mixed.
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hey ms. O
I like the passion of this piece, its written in the sytle of the sleazy poems (direct) without the sleazy content.
as i writer of sleazy poems i can tell you its not my mothers fault, she tried, she really did.
I'm not sure what your defintion of "real poetry" is. Is some rant about/against someone who did you wrong in a relatshonship a real poem.
Did you not get enough feedback on this site so you feel your work was under appreciated.
will miss you.
dave
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People write what they know about...there is nothing wrong with sex, it is a natural beautiful thing that is very expressive and makes wonderful poetry.
I don't understand why you feel the need to write and complain about it when you simply could have ignored those poems instead. Your loss, I suppose.
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