She's always there
every day
sitting
typing
at a computer.
The ones on either
side of her are
empty
vacant
And I wonder
who was there?
Friends?
Strangers?
Or
were they always
empty
Does she want
to be alone?
Is she resigned
to be alone?
Does she wish
someone
maybe a
special someone
would sit down
and talk to her?
Or maybe
she doesn't care
that she's alone.
Maybe she comes here
just
to be alone.
She's pretty
not gorgeous,
but pretty
when she looks
worried
I've never
seen her smile
She seems like someone
who shouldn't be alone
Whose friends,
if she has them,
should
watch her and
take care of her.
But
she's alone
taking care
of herself.
I wonder
what she's
typing.
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I like how your lines are short and sweet.
This made me sad, because I think I used to be this girl. I spent all my time on my computer with no one around me...
So, this hit home. It was an amazing poem.
ummm thirtieth line: You said: Maybe she comes her. I think it is supposed to be here. also, I think you have already been informed that gorgeous is spelled wrong.
Nice job. I loved this.
Twila**
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thank you so much for your comment.
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I really like this style. This is an imaginative poem, and I really like it. Love the last line.
It's consistent and really (like Himmelkratzer said) captures great emotion.
btw, you mispelled gorgeous.
LOVE IT!
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I love it. I absolutely love the ending. You're so good at capturing feelings with your words. I don't know what else to say. But I love it.
Himmel
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I love this! Could be my favorite of yours. Your capture things really well in little words. You are good at short poems. I like
Maybe she comes her
just
to be alone.
and the closing lines. You are amazing!
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awww thanks Hawk
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