Kiss me/kill me
Bleed me dry.
Fuck me ‘til
You make me cry.
Love me/hate me
Stab my back.
Cut me ‘til
I’m bleeding black.
Push me/pull me
Throw me around.
Hit me ‘til
I’m falling down.
Kiss me/kill me
Bleed me dry.
Fuck me ‘til
You make me cry.
Abuse me/use me
Fuck me/love me
Bite me/fight me
Kiss me/hate me
{push me away}
{put me to shame}
{fuck me}
{let me play your game}
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wow
this is very appealing. its like you've taken all the words a person can feel about love and hate and put it into words. it was one poem that i couldn't help but keep reading. Good job
language: 5, rhythm: 4, subject: 5, tone: 5, form: 4.
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Thanks! When I wrote it, I could see how contradicting it was, but I liked that element. It seemed to add more to the meaning. Thank you for your comment and applause.
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wow. i really like this one. i don't know what else to say. i like the apathy of it. the sense of giving up, giving in. great job.
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This has always been one of my favorites, and I'm glad that you liked it. Thanks for the comment and the applause!
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