Amplification of senses.
Colors scream, unlike their usual hushed tones.
Living in moments, not seconds, minutes, or hours.
Living spontaneously...
Just living.
Like your body is constantly being pushed back.
Faces reflect back in conjunctures of mutilation
Nature offers answers.
Consistent movement
You are the "kid" and the world is your "candy store"
A never-ending roller coaster, adventuring the unknown.
As if witnessing EVERYTHING for the first time.
Feeling like it's the first time you've seen the sky
Indulge in it's tranquil nature
Sink into euphoria
Splurge out on irrelevance.
Grasping every moment and relishing in it's significance
Feeling your arms around your soul
Mutilating the senses beyond existence
The temporary suspension of time
Suspension of Reason
Allowing the entrance of oneself in to questioning
Curiosity magnifying the world
Illusions interrupting logic
A yearning for something more
But content with what you have
An appreciation
A realization
An intensity
A truth
A vacation from reality...
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sky, this is quite good. I love the way you describe ideas and the words you use to do so. Your knowledge of the English language is tremendous. You present your points across so well so that they are easily understood. Also, your use of words is beautiful. I love the 1st sentence "amplification of senses." What a clever way of saying the senses were enhanced. And "indulge in its tranquil nature" to mean enjoy the sky. The way you express yourself is awesome. I could go on and on but you get the picture. Good job.
Later,
Birdie
P.S. I don't understand the title of your poem however. Can you explain that to me? Thanks.
language: 4, rhythm: 4, subject: 4, tone: 4, form: 4.
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Thank you so much for the comment. I'm so thankful that more and more people are beginning to appreciate my style. I'm glad you liked it. The title has a really long story behind it, but I like I told iphios, it's a buffalo with a unicorn's horn, and octopus tentacles for legs. Long story. Thanks for the read and comment.
-Kitten
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This is truly a tip-of-the-hat to Romanticism.
"Nature offers answers"
"You are the 'kid' and the world is your 'candy store'"
"As if witnessing EVERYTHING for the first time."
"Illusions interrupting logic"
All of these are very Romantic gestures, and they really brought my attention to the point of your poem.
I see a theme of innocence and virginity in what you are writing of, like a proverbial child in the proverbial candy store of the world, witnessing for his/or her self what it truly means to be alive. The great Transcendentalists wrote that only through experience can you truly learn a single thing: everything you read is a falsehood generated by someone else collective reality "experienced" by them or whomever "experienced" it before them. Your poem tells of an metaphysical awakening of the human spirit that can only be experienced when we take "a vacation from reality" (i.e. society), and it's an experience so beautiful that only one person can experience it: yourself. This poem truly entails individuality, and the statement you are making--whether conscious or not--is the purest and most beautiful statement imaginable.
language: 5, rhythm: 5, subject: 5, tone: 5, form: 5.
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Thank you so much for the comment! I guess my poem does have a lot of implications of romanticism. It wasn't intentional, I guess that's just how it my feelings translated into words. I'm glad this poem had a lot of meaning to you. It's always interesting to me how people interpret literature differently, as I've seen blatantly through the comments I've received. Thank you so much again for the comment.
-Kitten
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If we could only do that, crawl into a rabbits whole and just be away from all of this. There's this hypnotic tone to this. I can imagine this person saying this to another person who's slowly sinking into a trance. Even the way you wrote it has this even rhythm to it. Its almost like a chant.
Again, your style surfaces. You weave the big words so easily, rendering something seemingly non-poetic to its poetic potential. Such as:
"Faces reflect back in conjunctures of mutilation."
But once again, this poem, like your other poems 'demands' the person to go into herself. Your fascination for the inner self is evident here with lines such as "Like your body is constantly being pushed back" and "Feeling your arms around your soul". Aside from that, you venture into truth, into finding truth outside reality (which seems to mean society and its norms); of being true to the self and owning up to it. Interesting read as always.
Though i have to ask, what's with the title?
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Thank you so much for the comment. There is a long story to the title. But to try and sum it up as much as I can, it's a buffalo with a unicorn's horn, and octopus tentacles for legs.
Like I said long story.
Thanks for the read && comment.
-Kitten
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hey skyview
i viewed this as glorifyed naval gazing. the stuff that tripping teen-agers on a sleepover would discuss...and forget the next day at the mall.
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To each his own.
-Kitten
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hey sky..i would love to take a trip to this place that you speak of.sounds like the mental vacation of a lifetime,im assuming the title has a meaning but im not sure,
again your work has some tremendous lines,
"a yearning for something more
but content with what you have"
that stands out for me,more people should be content with what they have,including myself
great use of the English language,you have a huge respect and knowledge of words and its totally natural for you to write like this which i love..
always and always amen
rhet
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Thank you, thank you for the comment! It was quite the mental vacation, that's for sure. You wanna come next time? Ha.
Thanks again rhet.
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