I spent today
with my best friend
He gave his last five pounds
to a drunk
He lifted broken glass
in the park
He helped his mother and father
at the store
He exercised old homeless dogs
He smiled and he was happy
I took him home
for coffee
I turned around
but he was gone
I looked by the whiskey bottles,
he wasn`t there
I looked in the drugs cabinet,
he wasn`t there
I looked outside,
he wasn`t there
I looked in the mirror
and there he was,
staring right back at me...
I hope I see him again tomorrow
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i like this...you did great. When I work in nursing homes, I like the feeling of being able to come home and look in the mirror knowing i did a great deed, it makes me feel great. nicely done.
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hey Crimson,thank you very much..you are quite right,we should be kinder to ourselves and acknowledge our own goodness more
see you soon
rhet
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This poem is ADORABLE! It's like an individual accepting and learning to love themselves. It's as if someone is having a reawakening of their individual signficance. It's really a happy poem. The ending kind of made me do that "Awe" thing. They liked what they saw, they liked themselves, and they are hoping tommorrow they will feel as at piece with themselves as they were that day. Good write Terry.
-Kitten
language: 5, rhythm: 5, subject: 5, tone: 5, form: 5.
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hey sky,good morning,
your comment is pretty much bang on although the irony here is that its actually for anyone who is depressed, one day he/she is fine,the next is hell although people in general should be more accepting of who they are and the goodness they have...recently i have taken notice just how much your own mood can change others moods...maybe its this damn medication im on although its good gear most of the time
always and always amen
rhet
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I hope you do too. This was nicely written.
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hey aneZ,thank you for commenting,i`m ok today as well yea!!
i hope you are the same
see you soon
rhet
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this is excellent
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hey swagger,thank you very much
i`ll see you soon
rhet
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Provocative.
The human ego is a really deep and complex subject, yet you convey it in such a fluid and simple way that all previous inhibitions are left at the door. I saw a lot of me in the persona that you painted, and what really is attractive about this poem is its accessibility by anyone. Anybody (I am generalizing) could read this poem and see a little (or even large) piece of them self in the persona: realizing that they themselves can be better or greater than they would've ever guessed possible.
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hey rim,wonderful comment and im flattered, you nailed it..i tried to write the most accessible poem i could, nothing more for me to add, thank you so much
bye
rhet
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