Truth of light,
Burns this darkness,
Tearing away fear,
Left to seek solace
I fall, I stumble
Into grief, into pain
When we have lost
How can we see?
Ourselves in light
When mirrors of reality
Reflect distortion
Leading us away
Leering serpents
Poisoned sweets
What is truth?
When all is deceit?
One truth, one lie
All will see
The flames of song
Ignite into life
Author notes
This is a very contempory write I'd be happy to hear thoughts on this poem. Thank you
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Awesome
Daniel this is a very good poem, keep it up
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My favorite is the last stanza.So many can relate with what you say.It's nicely done and powerful piece.
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I felt the words deeply. So many can relate to how pain can distort reality. This "universal stumbling" can cause fresh wounds which you depict well. The imagry is vivid and evocative.
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I love the emotioned you've managed to squeeze onto this single page. It pops out and punches people in the face (or slap, for some people). The contemporary writings are sometimes looked down upon, but i love this. Great write! Hope to see more!
language: 5, rhythm: 4, subject: 4, tone: 5, form: 5.
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Great word choices here, and a deep sadness that comes off the page to slap me in the face. Great stuff!
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Brilliant
This poem just took my breath away!! I love the way the words leak from my computer screen and I can really feel the emotion and it is forever in my thoughts.
What inspired you to write this poem? (If I may ask)
Anyway I love it keep writing.
Power to your pen,
-Jas.
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Thank You
Well allot of it was inspired by what I'm going through but also how our sense of reality can sometimes be unrealistic its like a factual contraction. I hope this sort of makes sense I not really good at explaining sorry. Thanks for your comment
Distant Unknown
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Different, but a unique and wonderful different. I love it! You kept it powerful and true to the exact words. Wonderful emotions, keep it realistic, just like you did. My favorite stanza is the second. You used metaphoric language to create a image so pure and vivid! I am flawlessly breathless with your poetic talent.
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Thanks
Thank you for tking your time to read and also for your most kind comment I am glad that you enjoyed the imagery I am glad the metaphors seem to make sense thank again so much!
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I like it its diffrent I like the way you even though some of these words have been used before in diffrent context you made it unique I can see pepole relating to this good job.
~ERIKA~
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Thanks
Thank you for your comment I am glad you feel people would be able to relate to this I wasn't sure if theu would. Thanks for the encouragement.
Distant Unknown
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