Anger slips Into my blood and Stops my loving heart Cold. Swirls and Tumbles Into my brain. Fills my lungs With fire. I become it... Hungry, mindless, Flesh-seeking Heat. Mouth sewn shut With filthy thread. Scorching, dirty thread. Sadness cools the Flame. Cleanses the needle With saltwater tears. Seals the wound and Wets my lips. Calms the Raging energy within me. Blesses my Bleeding tongue with Bittersweet memories. Sweeps up my hair In a gentle breeze and Traces my face with Serenity. Love wipes away Every sapphire kiss. Blushes my cheeks and Melts my heart under Precious fingertips. Wraps me in Strong arms and Protects me with Battered wings. Heals every tender burn then Leads me home to Happiness. |
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-uh.. how're the linebreaks?-
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They're fine.
I like it centered. As I said the line breaks are fine. It wouldn't hurt to break it up with stanzas. Of course I'm not sure it would need them. Some of your metaphores I liked some I didn't. You lead the reader through it ok. You went from seathing anger to blissful happiness. It's a good thing you had this angel to lead you away from all your suffering. Who knows where you would have ended up without him. You have three or four typos. I've told you before to either paste them into a word document program so it will point them out or use the spell check.
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Thanks Brian. There is no Word document on the computer I'm currently using so that option is out... Could you point them out for me, please?
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This was truely beautiful, well done

T x

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Aw! Thanks.
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this was prettyy!
the line breaks were pretty perfect.
dont even worry aboutt those.
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Hehe. Thanks Aneiki.
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The line breakings are wonderfully done, Krista.
I think this one by you a lot. I missed reading new poems by you.
Anyway, is this by far a classic original of yours. Marvelous!

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Thanks AJ.
I'm glad you liked it. Haven't written in a while and I was afraid I had lost some of my pazzaz...
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Krista, you did not loose any pazzaz. Trust me, I did not write for a while. I posted some older works of mine; and then I just wrote one the other day, posted it, and people are telling me I kept the groove. You still have it, and you always will.
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Thanks AJ...
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My pleasure.
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