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Blazing Kisses


Anger slips
Into my blood and
Stops my loving heart
Cold.
Swirls and
Tumbles
Into my brain.
Fills my lungs
With fire.
I become it...
Hungry, mindless,
Flesh-seeking
Heat.
Mouth sewn shut
With filthy thread.
Scorching, dirty thread.
Sadness cools the
Flame.
Cleanses the needle
With saltwater tears.
Seals the wound and
Wets my lips.
Calms the
Raging energy within me.
Blesses my
Bleeding tongue with
Bittersweet memories.
Sweeps up my hair
In a gentle breeze and
Traces my face with
Serenity.
Love wipes away
Every sapphire kiss.
Blushes my cheeks and
Melts my heart under
Precious fingertips.
Wraps me in
Strong arms and
Protects me with
Battered wings.
Heals every tender burn then
Leads me home to
Happiness.

Author notes

-uh.. how're the linebreaks?-

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Comments

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  • Brian Balzer Greeters member
    July 3, 2009

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    They're fine.

    I like it centered. As I said the line breaks are fine. It wouldn't hurt to break it up with stanzas. Of course I'm not sure it would need them. Some of your metaphores I liked some I didn't. You lead the reader through it ok. You went from seathing anger to blissful happiness. It's a good thing you had this angel to lead you away from all your suffering. Who knows where you would have ended up without him. You have three or four typos. I've told you before to either paste them into a word document program so it will point them out or use the spell check.


    • Pretty Little Daisy gold member
      July 3, 2009
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      Thanks Brian. There is no Word document on the computer I'm currently using so that option is out... Could you point them out for me, please?

  • TallulahBelle
    July 2, 2009
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    This was truely beautiful, well done

    T x


  • Aneiki Keyana
    July 2, 2009
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    this was prettyy!
    the line breaks were pretty perfect.
    dont even worry aboutt those.


  • Soulless.
    July 2, 2009

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    The line breakings are wonderfully done, Krista.

    I think this one by you a lot. I missed reading new poems by you.

    Anyway, is this by far a classic original of yours. Marvelous!


    • Pretty Little Daisy gold member
      July 2, 2009
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      Thanks AJ. I'm glad you liked it. Haven't written in a while and I was afraid I had lost some of my pazzaz...


      • Soulless.
        July 2, 2009
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        Krista, you did not loose any pazzaz. Trust me, I did not write for a while. I posted some older works of mine; and then I just wrote one the other day, posted it, and people are telling me I kept the groove. You still have it, and you always will.

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