Never
Never again will I count
on you for my
happiness
Never will I bow down
to your will for my
validation
completeness
being
Never again will I crumble
because you say I am
unworthy
Never will I curl up and
cry
agonize
suffer
Never again will I allow
you to control my life
Never
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I love this... It's great to feel like this, sometimes.
Krista
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re; to relate: cupid is a hobbit known to be a thief,when u turn to follow he`ll stick the knife in deep, and when he`s got u by the balls, he`ll rip it out complete, to relate you`ll know by the pain you`ll know, the little f*^ker robbed you of your energy.
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to a tee
i know this poem inside but its not a person -
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Tell me how you relate to the poem.
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I felt this one. It flowed well and said volumes. I wan't sure about "whole being" though. How about "wholeness"?
language: 4, rhythm: 5, subject: 5, tone: 5, form: 5.
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Thanks for your help! I went with simply "being" instead of "whole being"...how does it read now?
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how soon we forget
After the pain the hurt. The heart seems to purge itself. Love to me is more a gift. Weather it is recipicated back or not. The truest blessing is to have tryed. Than not trying at all. Very well written. Great theme. Good structure. Thank you for the read.
language: 5, rhythm: 5, subject: 5, tone: 5, form: 5.
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